六、书面表达。
假设你是孙洁，你搬入了新家，请根据下列提示，向你的笔友苏海介绍你的新公寓。
提示：1. 紧邻一家大超市，距学校步行约五分钟；2. 位于十七楼，三室一厅……；3. 有自己的卧室，最喜欢阳台，因为……；4. 不满意只有一个浴室，要和家人共用。
要求：1. 要点齐全，语言通顺，语意连贯；2. 90 词左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Su Hai,
How are you? I'm writing to you in my new flat.
I hope you can come and visit my new flat soon.
Best wishes,
Sun Jie
假设你是孙洁，你搬入了新家，请根据下列提示，向你的笔友苏海介绍你的新公寓。
提示：1. 紧邻一家大超市，距学校步行约五分钟；2. 位于十七楼，三室一厅……；3. 有自己的卧室，最喜欢阳台，因为……；4. 不满意只有一个浴室，要和家人共用。
要求：1. 要点齐全，语言通顺，语意连贯；2. 90 词左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Su Hai,
How are you? I'm writing to you in my new flat.
It brings me great joy to share the details with you.
My new flat is next to a big supermarket and it's about five minutes' walk from my school. My home is on the 17th floor. There are three bedrooms, a living room, a kitchen, a bathroom and a big balcony.
I'm happy to have my own bedroom now. The balcony is my favourite because I can sit there and chat with my sister.
But there is only one bathroom, so I have to share it with my family members.
I hope you can come and visit my new flat soon.
Best wishes,
Sun Jie
答案：One possible version:
Dear Su Hai,
How are you? I'm writing to you in my new flat. It brings me great joy to share the details with you.
My new flat is next to a big supermarket and it's about five minutes' walk from my school. My home is on the 17th floor. There are three bedrooms, a living room, a kitchen, a bathroom and a big balcony.
I'm happy to have my own bedroom now. The balcony is my favourite because I can sit there and chat with my sister. But there is only one bathroom, so I have to share it with my family members.
I hope you can come and visit my new flat soon.
Best wishes,
Sun Jie
Dear Su Hai,
How are you? I'm writing to you in my new flat. It brings me great joy to share the details with you.
My new flat is next to a big supermarket and it's about five minutes' walk from my school. My home is on the 17th floor. There are three bedrooms, a living room, a kitchen, a bathroom and a big balcony.
I'm happy to have my own bedroom now. The balcony is my favourite because I can sit there and chat with my sister. But there is only one bathroom, so I have to share it with my family members.
I hope you can come and visit my new flat soon.
Best wishes,
Sun Jie
解析：
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先明确写作身份是孙洁，收信人是笔友苏海，写作核心主题是介绍自己的新公寓。接下来要先把题干给出的4个提示要点全部标记出来，避免遗漏：首先介绍公寓的地理位置优势，再说明公寓的楼层和户型结构，接着讲自己对卧室和阳台的喜爱，最后补充说明对浴室数量的小不满。行文要贴合给笔友写信的轻松友好语气，控制总词数在90左右，衔接好题目给出的开头和结尾，保证语意连贯通顺即可。
【解析】
1. 承接题干给出的开头句，自然过渡，引出要向笔友分享新公寓相关信息的内容；
2. 首先介绍公寓的区位：点明公寓紧邻大型超市，距离学校仅步行五分钟的路程，再说明公寓位于17楼，介绍整体三室一厅的户型，补充厨卫、阳台等配套房间，让内容更饱满；
3. 接着描述个人居住感受：先说明自己很开心拥有独立卧室，点明最喜欢阳台，补充合理的日常场景作为原因，再用转折词引出不足：公寓只有一个浴室，需要和家人共用，覆盖所有提示要点；
4. 最后衔接题干给出的结尾句，检查所有要点是否齐全，修正语法错误，调整语句让行文流畅，保证词数符合要求。
【答案】
Dear Su Hai,
How are you? I'm writing to you in my new flat. It brings me great joy to share the details with you.
My new flat is next to a big supermarket and it's about five minutes' walk from my school. My home is on the 17th floor. There are three bedrooms, a living room, a kitchen, a bathroom and a big balcony.
I'm happy to have my own bedroom now. The balcony is my favourite because I can sit there and chat with my sister. But there is only one bathroom, so I have to share it with my family members.
I hope you can come and visit my new flat soon.
Best wishes,
Sun Jie
【知识点】
英语书信写作，居住话题表达，要点型作文写作
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干全部提示要点，行文逻辑清晰，从公寓外部区位到内部户型，再到个人居住感受层层递进，语气贴合给笔友写信的轻松友好风格，用到的five minutes' walk、share...with...等短语表达地道准确，词数符合题目要求，没有语法错误，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。学生写作时要注意不要遗漏要点，同时注意序数词、名词所有格的正确使用，避免基础语法错误。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先明确写作身份是孙洁，收信人是笔友苏海，写作核心主题是介绍自己的新公寓。接下来要先把题干给出的4个提示要点全部标记出来，避免遗漏：首先介绍公寓的地理位置优势，再说明公寓的楼层和户型结构，接着讲自己对卧室和阳台的喜爱，最后补充说明对浴室数量的小不满。行文要贴合给笔友写信的轻松友好语气，控制总词数在90左右，衔接好题目给出的开头和结尾，保证语意连贯通顺即可。
【解析】
1. 承接题干给出的开头句，自然过渡，引出要向笔友分享新公寓相关信息的内容；
2. 首先介绍公寓的区位：点明公寓紧邻大型超市，距离学校仅步行五分钟的路程，再说明公寓位于17楼，介绍整体三室一厅的户型，补充厨卫、阳台等配套房间，让内容更饱满；
3. 接着描述个人居住感受：先说明自己很开心拥有独立卧室，点明最喜欢阳台，补充合理的日常场景作为原因，再用转折词引出不足：公寓只有一个浴室，需要和家人共用，覆盖所有提示要点；
4. 最后衔接题干给出的结尾句，检查所有要点是否齐全，修正语法错误，调整语句让行文流畅，保证词数符合要求。
【答案】
Dear Su Hai,
How are you? I'm writing to you in my new flat. It brings me great joy to share the details with you.
My new flat is next to a big supermarket and it's about five minutes' walk from my school. My home is on the 17th floor. There are three bedrooms, a living room, a kitchen, a bathroom and a big balcony.
I'm happy to have my own bedroom now. The balcony is my favourite because I can sit there and chat with my sister. But there is only one bathroom, so I have to share it with my family members.
I hope you can come and visit my new flat soon.
Best wishes,
Sun Jie
【知识点】
英语书信写作，居住话题表达，要点型作文写作
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干全部提示要点，行文逻辑清晰，从公寓外部区位到内部户型，再到个人居住感受层层递进，语气贴合给笔友写信的轻松友好风格，用到的five minutes' walk、share...with...等短语表达地道准确，词数符合题目要求，没有语法错误，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。学生写作时要注意不要遗漏要点，同时注意序数词、名词所有格的正确使用，避免基础语法错误。
【难度系数】
0.7