五、书面表达。
假如你住在花园小区，你想为社区献计献策，打造温馨和谐的社区。请根据思维导图，以“To build a better community”为题，写一份演讲稿。
注意：1. 要点齐全并拓展，文章通顺；2. 词数 80 左右，演讲稿开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；3. 文章中请勿提及真实校名及姓名。
To build a better community
Hello, everyone. I'd like to share my ideas for helping the community with you.
I hope you will like my ideas. Let's work together to make our community a better place.
假如你住在花园小区，你想为社区献计献策，打造温馨和谐的社区。请根据思维导图，以“To build a better community”为题，写一份演讲稿。
注意：1. 要点齐全并拓展，文章通顺；2. 词数 80 左右，演讲稿开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；3. 文章中请勿提及真实校名及姓名。
To build a better community
Hello, everyone. I'd like to share my ideas for helping the community with you.
I want to organize an activity called "To build a better community". Let's take action to give our community a new life.
First, I'd like to invite some engineers to help the old people learn how to use the Internet and this can make their lives easier. Second, I plan to organize some gardeners to grow flowers and plant trees. We can enjoy beautiful views. Last, I am going to ask parents and their children to collect old books, toys and clothes. I'll sell them to raise money for the old people's home.
First, I'd like to invite some engineers to help the old people learn how to use the Internet and this can make their lives easier. Second, I plan to organize some gardeners to grow flowers and plant trees. We can enjoy beautiful views. Last, I am going to ask parents and their children to collect old books, toys and clothes. I'll sell them to raise money for the old people's home.
I hope you will like my ideas. Let's work together to make our community a better place.
答案：One possible version:
To build a better community
Hello, everyone. I'd like to share my ideas for helping the community with you. I want to organize an activity called "To build a better community". Let's take action to give our community a new life.
First, I'd like to invite some engineers to help the old people learn how to use the Internet and this can make their lives easier. Second, I plan to organize some gardeners to grow flowers and plant trees. We can enjoy beautiful views. Last, I am going to ask parents and their children to collect old books, toys and clothes. I'll sell them to raise money for the old people's home.
I hope you will like my ideas. Let's work together to make our community a better place.
To build a better community
Hello, everyone. I'd like to share my ideas for helping the community with you. I want to organize an activity called "To build a better community". Let's take action to give our community a new life.
First, I'd like to invite some engineers to help the old people learn how to use the Internet and this can make their lives easier. Second, I plan to organize some gardeners to grow flowers and plant trees. We can enjoy beautiful views. Last, I am going to ask parents and their children to collect old books, toys and clothes. I'll sell them to raise money for the old people's home.
I hope you will like my ideas. Let's work together to make our community a better place.
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道题首先先审题：明确文体是面向社区居民的演讲稿，主题是打造更美好的社区，词数要求80左右，开头和结尾已经给出无需自行创作。接下来梳理思维导图给出的全部核心要点：三类不同群体对应的行动，分别是工程师帮扶老人、园艺师种植花卉绿植、家长和孩子开展收集类公益活动。接下来我们可以用First、Second、Last这类逻辑连接词把三个要点串联起来，给每个要点补充符合生活逻辑的合理细节，比如工程师可以教老人使用互联网，园艺师种花种树美化环境，亲子收集旧物做公益，保证要点齐全、语句通顺，符合演讲稿亲切自然的语气即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 承接给定的开头，先引出共同行动改造社区的总起句，自然过渡到分点给出具体建议。
2. 第一点对应工程师的相关内容：结合工程师的身份，补充具体帮扶内容，比如教老年人使用互联网，让老人的日常生活更便利，符合设定逻辑。
3. 第二点对应园艺师的相关内容：补充除种花外还可以种树的细节，说明这类行动可以美化社区环境，让所有居民都能欣赏到优美景色，贴合园艺师的工作属性。
4. 第三点对应家长和孩子的相关内容：补充收集的物品为旧书、旧玩具、旧衣物，后续可以通过义卖筹款捐赠给敬老院，让收集活动更有实际意义。
5. 用逻辑连接词串联所有内容，控制总词数在要求范围内，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾即可。
【答案】
One possible version:
To build a better community
Hello, everyone. I'd like to share my ideas for helping the community with you. I want to organize an activity called "To build a better community". Let's take action to give our community a new life.
First, I'd like to invite some engineers to help the old people learn how to use the Internet and this can make their lives easier. Second, I plan to organize some gardeners to grow flowers and plant trees. We can enjoy beautiful views. Last, I am going to ask parents and their children to collect old books, toys and clothes. I'll sell them to raise money for the old people's home.
I hope you will like my ideas. Let's work together to make our community a better place.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作
英语演讲稿写作
一般将来时应用
【点评】
本题是给出思维导图提示的应用文写作，要点指向非常明确，学生只需要覆盖全部给定要点，结合生活常识补充合理的细节内容，使用合适的逻辑连接词梳理行文结构，就可以写出符合要求的作文，同时也能引导学生思考社区公益的可行方案，做到学以致用。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道题首先先审题：明确文体是面向社区居民的演讲稿，主题是打造更美好的社区，词数要求80左右，开头和结尾已经给出无需自行创作。接下来梳理思维导图给出的全部核心要点：三类不同群体对应的行动，分别是工程师帮扶老人、园艺师种植花卉绿植、家长和孩子开展收集类公益活动。接下来我们可以用First、Second、Last这类逻辑连接词把三个要点串联起来，给每个要点补充符合生活逻辑的合理细节，比如工程师可以教老人使用互联网，园艺师种花种树美化环境，亲子收集旧物做公益，保证要点齐全、语句通顺，符合演讲稿亲切自然的语气即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 承接给定的开头，先引出共同行动改造社区的总起句，自然过渡到分点给出具体建议。
2. 第一点对应工程师的相关内容：结合工程师的身份，补充具体帮扶内容，比如教老年人使用互联网，让老人的日常生活更便利，符合设定逻辑。
3. 第二点对应园艺师的相关内容：补充除种花外还可以种树的细节，说明这类行动可以美化社区环境，让所有居民都能欣赏到优美景色，贴合园艺师的工作属性。
4. 第三点对应家长和孩子的相关内容：补充收集的物品为旧书、旧玩具、旧衣物，后续可以通过义卖筹款捐赠给敬老院，让收集活动更有实际意义。
5. 用逻辑连接词串联所有内容，控制总词数在要求范围内，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾即可。
【答案】
One possible version:
To build a better community
Hello, everyone. I'd like to share my ideas for helping the community with you. I want to organize an activity called "To build a better community". Let's take action to give our community a new life.
First, I'd like to invite some engineers to help the old people learn how to use the Internet and this can make their lives easier. Second, I plan to organize some gardeners to grow flowers and plant trees. We can enjoy beautiful views. Last, I am going to ask parents and their children to collect old books, toys and clothes. I'll sell them to raise money for the old people's home.
I hope you will like my ideas. Let's work together to make our community a better place.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作
英语演讲稿写作
一般将来时应用
【点评】
本题是给出思维导图提示的应用文写作，要点指向非常明确，学生只需要覆盖全部给定要点，结合生活常识补充合理的细节内容，使用合适的逻辑连接词梳理行文结构，就可以写出符合要求的作文，同时也能引导学生思考社区公益的可行方案，做到学以致用。
【难度系数】
0.7