典型例题
假如你想利用课余时间为爸爸妈妈设计一套服装。请你根据以下提示，写一篇 80 词左右的英语短文，介绍你设计的衣服。
提示:1. 妈妈的连衣裙是粉红色的，用丝绸制成;靴子是白色的，用皮革制成。
2. 爸爸的 T 恤衫是黄白相间的，牛仔裤是蓝色的。T 恤衫和牛仔裤都是纯棉的。
注意:须根据所给提示适当发挥，思路清晰、语句通顺、表达流畅。
思路点拨
1. 审体裁——记叙文类短文。
2. 审内容——介绍课余时间为父母设计的衣服。
3. 审时态——以一般现在时为主。
4. 审篇幅——词数控制在 80 个左右，保证语句连贯，逻辑清晰，无语法错误。
范文欣赏
I would like to design a special outfit for my parents. I plan to design a dress and a pair of boots for my mother. The dress is pink and made of silk. The boots are white and made of leather. I think she will look pretty in them.
I want to design a T-shirt and a pair of jeans for my father. The T-shirt is yellow and white and the jeans are blue. They are both made of cotton. I think they are comfortable to wear.
I hope my parents will be happy when they
假如你想利用课余时间为爸爸妈妈设计一套服装。请你根据以下提示，写一篇 80 词左右的英语短文，介绍你设计的衣服。
提示:1. 妈妈的连衣裙是粉红色的，用丝绸制成;靴子是白色的，用皮革制成。
2. 爸爸的 T 恤衫是黄白相间的，牛仔裤是蓝色的。T 恤衫和牛仔裤都是纯棉的。
注意:须根据所给提示适当发挥，思路清晰、语句通顺、表达流畅。
思路点拨
1. 审体裁——记叙文类短文。
2. 审内容——介绍课余时间为父母设计的衣服。
3. 审时态——以一般现在时为主。
4. 审篇幅——词数控制在 80 个左右，保证语句连贯，逻辑清晰，无语法错误。
范文欣赏
I would like to design a special outfit for my parents. I plan to design a dress and a pair of boots for my mother. The dress is pink and made of silk. The boots are white and made of leather. I think she will look pretty in them.
I want to design a T-shirt and a pair of jeans for my father. The T-shirt is yellow and white and the jeans are blue. They are both made of cotton. I think they are comfortable to wear.
I hope my parents will be happy when they
答案：I want to design a set of clothes for my parents in my free time.
For my mother, her dress is pink and made of silk. Her boots are white and made of leather. I think she will look very pretty in them.
For my father, his T-shirt is yellow and white, and his jeans are blue. Both of them are made of cotton, so they are very comfortable to wear.
I hope my parents will like my designs.
For my mother, her dress is pink and made of silk. Her boots are white and made of leather. I think she will look very pretty in them.
For my father, his T-shirt is yellow and white, and his jeans are blue. Both of them are made of cotton, so they are very comfortable to wear.
I hope my parents will like my designs.
解析：
【分析】
首先拿到题目先完成审题步骤：第一明确核心写作主题是介绍自己为父母设计的服装，体裁为介绍类短文，时态以一般现在时为主，词数要求80左右。接下来搭建写作逻辑框架：第一步开篇直接点明写作目的，说明自己打算在课余时间为父母设计服装；第二步拆分内容，先对应提示信息逐一介绍妈妈的服饰的颜色、材质，适当补充合理评价比如穿上会很好看；第三步再介绍爸爸的服饰的颜色、纯棉的材质特点，补充说明穿着舒适；最后收尾表达希望父母喜欢设计的心愿，全程要确保所有给出的提示要点都不遗漏，语句连贯通顺，控制总词数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：用简单句直接说明核心意图，即想要在课余时间为父母设计一套衣服，开门见山引入主题。
2. 介绍妈妈的设计：按照提示顺序依次说明妈妈的连衣裙是粉色、丝绸材质，靴子是白色、皮革材质，补充合理评价，说明妈妈穿上会很好看，符合日常表达逻辑。
3. 介绍爸爸的设计：按照提示说明爸爸的T恤是黄白相间，牛仔裤是蓝色，点明两件衣物都是纯棉材质，补充说明纯棉衣物穿着十分舒适，内容完整贴合提示。
4. 收尾：用简短的句子表达自己希望父母会喜欢这些设计的美好心愿，让短文结构完整。最后通读全文检查，确认所有提示要点都覆盖，时态统一没有语法错误，词数符合80词左右的要求。
【答案】
I want to design a set of clothes for my parents in my free time.
For my mother, her dress is pink and made of silk. Her boots are white and made of leather. I think she will look very pretty in them.
For my father, his T-shirt is yellow and white, and his jeans are blue. Both of them are made of cotton, so they are very comfortable to wear.
I hope my parents will like my designs.
【知识点】
衣物类英语表达
be made of固定搭配
基础英语写作
【点评】
本题属于基础类英语写作题，给出的提示信息非常明确，不需要学生额外拓展复杂内容，只需要将给出的服饰颜色、材质相关要点用正确的英语句式串联，补充少量衔接性的评价内容即可完成，重点考察学生对衣物相关词汇、材质表达结构的掌握，以及基础的语句组织能力，只要不遗漏要点基本都能拿到合格以上的分数。
【难度系数】
0.8
首先拿到题目先完成审题步骤：第一明确核心写作主题是介绍自己为父母设计的服装，体裁为介绍类短文，时态以一般现在时为主，词数要求80左右。接下来搭建写作逻辑框架：第一步开篇直接点明写作目的，说明自己打算在课余时间为父母设计服装；第二步拆分内容，先对应提示信息逐一介绍妈妈的服饰的颜色、材质，适当补充合理评价比如穿上会很好看；第三步再介绍爸爸的服饰的颜色、纯棉的材质特点，补充说明穿着舒适；最后收尾表达希望父母喜欢设计的心愿，全程要确保所有给出的提示要点都不遗漏，语句连贯通顺，控制总词数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：用简单句直接说明核心意图，即想要在课余时间为父母设计一套衣服，开门见山引入主题。
2. 介绍妈妈的设计：按照提示顺序依次说明妈妈的连衣裙是粉色、丝绸材质，靴子是白色、皮革材质，补充合理评价，说明妈妈穿上会很好看，符合日常表达逻辑。
3. 介绍爸爸的设计：按照提示说明爸爸的T恤是黄白相间，牛仔裤是蓝色，点明两件衣物都是纯棉材质，补充说明纯棉衣物穿着十分舒适，内容完整贴合提示。
4. 收尾：用简短的句子表达自己希望父母会喜欢这些设计的美好心愿，让短文结构完整。最后通读全文检查，确认所有提示要点都覆盖，时态统一没有语法错误，词数符合80词左右的要求。
【答案】
I want to design a set of clothes for my parents in my free time.
For my mother, her dress is pink and made of silk. Her boots are white and made of leather. I think she will look very pretty in them.
For my father, his T-shirt is yellow and white, and his jeans are blue. Both of them are made of cotton, so they are very comfortable to wear.
I hope my parents will like my designs.
【知识点】
衣物类英语表达
be made of固定搭配
基础英语写作
【点评】
本题属于基础类英语写作题，给出的提示信息非常明确，不需要学生额外拓展复杂内容，只需要将给出的服饰颜色、材质相关要点用正确的英语句式串联，补充少量衔接性的评价内容即可完成，重点考察学生对衣物相关词汇、材质表达结构的掌握，以及基础的语句组织能力，只要不遗漏要点基本都能拿到合格以上的分数。
【难度系数】
0.8
七年级2班的学生们正在艺术教室举办一场时装表演。请根据以下提示以“A FashionShow”为题，写一篇短文介绍这次表演，并发表自己的感想，词数不少于70。
主题:时装表演
地点:艺术教室
主办方:七年级2班学生
目的:了解更多时尚
活动概述:学生们穿着不同款式的衣服走在舞台上,个个都很精神。李浩看上去非常酷,他穿着一件黄色棉质衬衫和一条蓝色牛仔裤。
写作要求:要点齐全,语法正确,语句通顺,文章中必须包含所给出的主要信息,并作适当发挥。
A Fashion Show
主题:时装表演
地点:艺术教室
主办方:七年级2班学生
目的:了解更多时尚
活动概述:学生们穿着不同款式的衣服走在舞台上,个个都很精神。李浩看上去非常酷,他穿着一件黄色棉质衬衫和一条蓝色牛仔裤。
写作要求:要点齐全,语法正确,语句通顺,文章中必须包含所给出的主要信息,并作适当发挥。
A Fashion Show
Look! The students from Class 2, Grade 7 are having a fashion show in the art classroom. They want to learn more about fashion. The students all look very smart. All of them are wearing different styles of clothes. They walk to the stage one after another. Li Hao is wearing a yellow cotton shirt and a pair of blue jeans. He looks very cool. All in all, everyone looks smart and modern. The show is really a great success. What a great time they are having!
答案：写作能力突破
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇记叙文。②时态:以一般现在时为主。
③提示:须紧扣“活动背景、现场情况、活动意义”核心要点,可补充具体人物的穿搭细节增强画面感。
[写作步骤]
第一步,点明活动主体(七年级2班)、时间(今天)、地点(美术教室)及活动目的;第二步,描述舞台上学生的穿搭风格与状态(举例具体同学穿搭);第三步,总结时装秀的意义与价值。
[词句积累]
①have a fashion show 举办时装秀 ②learn more about 学习更多关于 ③ different styles of 不同类型的 ④one after another 一个接一个 ⑤ all in all 总而言之
⑥What a great time they are having!(感叹句)
One possible version:
A Fashion Show
Look! The students from Class 2, Grade 7 are having a fashion show in the art classroom. They want to learn more about fashion. The students all look very smart. All of them are wearing different styles of clothes. They walk to the stage one after another. Li Hao is wearing a yellow cotton shirt and a pair of blue jeans. He looks very cool. All in all, everyone looks smart and modern. The show is really a great success. What a great time they are having!
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇记叙文。②时态:以一般现在时为主。
③提示:须紧扣“活动背景、现场情况、活动意义”核心要点,可补充具体人物的穿搭细节增强画面感。
[写作步骤]
第一步,点明活动主体(七年级2班)、时间(今天)、地点(美术教室)及活动目的;第二步,描述舞台上学生的穿搭风格与状态(举例具体同学穿搭);第三步,总结时装秀的意义与价值。
[词句积累]
①have a fashion show 举办时装秀 ②learn more about 学习更多关于 ③ different styles of 不同类型的 ④one after another 一个接一个 ⑤ all in all 总而言之
⑥What a great time they are having!(感叹句)
One possible version:
A Fashion Show
Look! The students from Class 2, Grade 7 are having a fashion show in the art classroom. They want to learn more about fashion. The students all look very smart. All of them are wearing different styles of clothes. They walk to the stage one after another. Li Hao is wearing a yellow cotton shirt and a pair of blue jeans. He looks very cool. All in all, everyone looks smart and modern. The show is really a great success. What a great time they are having!
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先第一步要先审题：确定体裁是介绍活动的记叙文，核心时态搭配现在进行时和一般现在时即可，先把题干给出的所有必写要点全部标记出来避免遗漏：1.活动主题为时装秀 2.举办地点是艺术教室 3.主办方是七年级2班学生 4.活动目的是了解更多时尚 5.学生们穿不同款式衣服走秀、状态精神 6.李浩穿黄色棉衬衫、蓝色牛仔裤，看起来很酷。接下来梳理写作逻辑：开头直接点明活动正在开展，把活动的基础信息交代清楚；中间部分先总述现场所有学生的走秀状态，再具体描写李浩的穿搭细节丰富画面；最后收尾发表感想，评价活动的意义，适当补充衔接短语，保证词数超过70、语句通顺即可。
【解析】
写作按照三步完成：
1. 开篇引入：直接用现在进行时点明正在发生的活动，抛出全部核心基础信息，点明七2班的学生正在艺术教室举办时装秀，说明举办活动的目的是了解更多时尚，开门见山贴合主题。
2. 细节描写：先总写所有学生的整体状态：大家穿着不同款式的衣服，依次走上舞台，每个人都神采奕奕，再聚焦题干指定的人物李浩，具体描写他的黄色棉质衬衫、蓝色牛仔裤的穿搭，突出他看起来非常酷的特点，全覆盖给定要点。
3. 收尾感想：对整场时装秀做总结评价，说明活动办得很成功，大家都玩得很开心，加入感叹句提升表达亮点，让文章内容更饱满。
【答案】
A Fashion Show
Look! The students from Class 2, Grade 7 are having a fashion show in the art classroom. They want to learn more about fashion. The students all look very smart. All of them are wearing different styles of clothes. They walk to the stage one after another. Li Hao is wearing a yellow cotton shirt and a pair of blue jeans. He looks very cool. All in all, everyone looks smart and modern. The show is really a great success. What a great time they are having!
【知识点】
1. 英语记叙文写作
2. 一般现在时态运用
3. 提示类作文谋篇
【点评】
本题是七年级常见的提示类话题写作，所有核心信息都已经明确给出，不需要学生额外构思复杂情节，只需要按照"总-分-总"的结构整合所有要点，适当补充少量衔接词和收尾感想就能达标。写作时注意先把所有给定要点逐一核对标记，避免出现漏点扣分的情况，适当使用积累的固定短语和感叹句可以让作文更出彩，拿到更高分数。
【难度系数】
0.8
拿到这道写作题，首先第一步要先审题：确定体裁是介绍活动的记叙文，核心时态搭配现在进行时和一般现在时即可，先把题干给出的所有必写要点全部标记出来避免遗漏：1.活动主题为时装秀 2.举办地点是艺术教室 3.主办方是七年级2班学生 4.活动目的是了解更多时尚 5.学生们穿不同款式衣服走秀、状态精神 6.李浩穿黄色棉衬衫、蓝色牛仔裤，看起来很酷。接下来梳理写作逻辑：开头直接点明活动正在开展，把活动的基础信息交代清楚；中间部分先总述现场所有学生的走秀状态，再具体描写李浩的穿搭细节丰富画面；最后收尾发表感想，评价活动的意义，适当补充衔接短语，保证词数超过70、语句通顺即可。
【解析】
写作按照三步完成：
1. 开篇引入：直接用现在进行时点明正在发生的活动，抛出全部核心基础信息，点明七2班的学生正在艺术教室举办时装秀，说明举办活动的目的是了解更多时尚，开门见山贴合主题。
2. 细节描写：先总写所有学生的整体状态：大家穿着不同款式的衣服，依次走上舞台，每个人都神采奕奕，再聚焦题干指定的人物李浩，具体描写他的黄色棉质衬衫、蓝色牛仔裤的穿搭，突出他看起来非常酷的特点，全覆盖给定要点。
3. 收尾感想：对整场时装秀做总结评价，说明活动办得很成功，大家都玩得很开心，加入感叹句提升表达亮点，让文章内容更饱满。
【答案】
A Fashion Show
Look! The students from Class 2, Grade 7 are having a fashion show in the art classroom. They want to learn more about fashion. The students all look very smart. All of them are wearing different styles of clothes. They walk to the stage one after another. Li Hao is wearing a yellow cotton shirt and a pair of blue jeans. He looks very cool. All in all, everyone looks smart and modern. The show is really a great success. What a great time they are having!
【知识点】
1. 英语记叙文写作
2. 一般现在时态运用
3. 提示类作文谋篇
【点评】
本题是七年级常见的提示类话题写作，所有核心信息都已经明确给出，不需要学生额外构思复杂情节，只需要按照"总-分-总"的结构整合所有要点，适当补充少量衔接词和收尾感想就能达标。写作时注意先把所有给定要点逐一核对标记，避免出现漏点扣分的情况，适当使用积累的固定短语和感叹句可以让作文更出彩，拿到更高分数。
【难度系数】
0.8