典型例题
在我国春节期间,长辈都会给晚辈压岁钱,你一般是如何处理压岁钱的呢?请你以"My Lucky Money"为题,根据所提问题写一篇80词左右的短文。
1. How do you feel when you get red packets?
2. What do you spend the money on?
3. What's your opinion about spending money?
My Lucky Money
思路点拨
1. 审体裁——记叙文。
2. 审内容——围绕春节压岁钱展开,讲述自己收到压岁钱的心情、使用方式及对花钱的看法,体现正确的金钱观和消费观。
3. 审时态——一般现在时为主。
4. 审篇幅——内容需完整覆盖三个问题(心情、花费方式、花钱观点);词数控制在80个左右,行文连贯通顺,无语法错误。
范文欣赏
My Lucky Money
I feel very happy when I receive the lucky money from my parents and relatives.
My mother always saves part of my lucky money. She promises to return it to me when I grow up. So with the rest of the money, I can buy some books on science or art. These books lead me into a bigger world. I can get a lot of
在我国春节期间,长辈都会给晚辈压岁钱,你一般是如何处理压岁钱的呢?请你以"My Lucky Money"为题,根据所提问题写一篇80词左右的短文。
1. How do you feel when you get red packets?
2. What do you spend the money on?
3. What's your opinion about spending money?
My Lucky Money
思路点拨
1. 审体裁——记叙文。
2. 审内容——围绕春节压岁钱展开,讲述自己收到压岁钱的心情、使用方式及对花钱的看法,体现正确的金钱观和消费观。
3. 审时态——一般现在时为主。
4. 审篇幅——内容需完整覆盖三个问题(心情、花费方式、花钱观点);词数控制在80个左右,行文连贯通顺,无语法错误。
范文欣赏
My Lucky Money
I feel very happy when I receive the lucky money from my parents and relatives.
My mother always saves part of my lucky money. She promises to return it to me when I grow up. So with the rest of the money, I can buy some books on science or art. These books lead me into a bigger world. I can get a lot of
答案：My Lucky Money
I feel very happy when I get red packets from my elders during the Spring Festival.
Most of my lucky money is kept by my parents to pay for my future study. I use the rest to buy my favourite storybooks and stationery I need at school. Sometimes I also spend a little money on small gifts for my parents.
I think we should use money properly, and never waste it on unimportant things. We should form a good habit of saving money.
I feel very happy when I get red packets from my elders during the Spring Festival.
Most of my lucky money is kept by my parents to pay for my future study. I use the rest to buy my favourite storybooks and stationery I need at school. Sometimes I also spend a little money on small gifts for my parents.
I think we should use money properly, and never waste it on unimportant things. We should form a good habit of saving money.
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要明确题干给出的三个必须覆盖的核心要点：收到红包的感受、压岁钱的使用方向、个人的消费观念，同时确定文体为记叙文，时态以一般现在时为主，词数控制在80左右。首先开篇直接点明春节收到长辈红包的愉悦心情，回应第一个问题；接着结合学生的真实生活场景说明压岁钱的具体分配和用途，回应第二个问题；最后输出正向的理性消费、不浪费、养成储蓄习惯的观点，回应第三个问题，全程注意语句衔接自然，避免语法错误，保证内容完整通顺。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：第一句直接回应第一个问题，说明春节期间收到长辈红包时自己十分开心，开门见山贴合主题。
2. 主体展开：第二部分回应第二个问题，清晰说明压岁钱的安排：大部分由父母保管用于未来的学业支出，剩余部分用来购买自己喜爱的故事书和在校需要的文具，偶尔也会用少量钱给父母准备小礼物，内容真实贴合学生身份。
3. 结尾升华：最后部分回应第三个问题，点明自己的消费观念：我们应当合理使用金钱，不要把钱浪费在无意义的事物上，要养成储蓄的好习惯，传递正向的金钱观。
4. 整体核查：通读全文确认三个要点全部覆盖，时态统一为一般现在时，词数符合要求，无语法错误，行文流畅连贯。
【答案】
My Lucky Money
I feel very happy when I get red packets from my elders during the Spring Festival.
Most of my lucky money is kept by my parents to pay for my future study. I use the rest to buy my favourite storybooks and stationery I need at school. Sometimes I also spend a little money on small gifts for my parents.
I think we should use money properly, and never waste it on unimportant things. We should form a good habit of saving money.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，要点类作文写作，一般现在时运用
【点评】
这篇短文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部三个写作要点，内容贴合中学生的真实生活，逻辑层层递进，从收红包的心情到压岁钱的用途再到消费观念的表达衔接自然，没有冗余内容，词数符合要求，传递了正确的消费观和金钱观，是非常规范的同话题写作参考范本。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题首先要明确题干给出的三个必须覆盖的核心要点：收到红包的感受、压岁钱的使用方向、个人的消费观念，同时确定文体为记叙文，时态以一般现在时为主，词数控制在80左右。首先开篇直接点明春节收到长辈红包的愉悦心情，回应第一个问题；接着结合学生的真实生活场景说明压岁钱的具体分配和用途，回应第二个问题；最后输出正向的理性消费、不浪费、养成储蓄习惯的观点，回应第三个问题，全程注意语句衔接自然，避免语法错误，保证内容完整通顺。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：第一句直接回应第一个问题，说明春节期间收到长辈红包时自己十分开心，开门见山贴合主题。
2. 主体展开：第二部分回应第二个问题，清晰说明压岁钱的安排：大部分由父母保管用于未来的学业支出，剩余部分用来购买自己喜爱的故事书和在校需要的文具，偶尔也会用少量钱给父母准备小礼物，内容真实贴合学生身份。
3. 结尾升华：最后部分回应第三个问题，点明自己的消费观念：我们应当合理使用金钱，不要把钱浪费在无意义的事物上，要养成储蓄的好习惯，传递正向的金钱观。
4. 整体核查：通读全文确认三个要点全部覆盖，时态统一为一般现在时，词数符合要求，无语法错误，行文流畅连贯。
【答案】
My Lucky Money
I feel very happy when I get red packets from my elders during the Spring Festival.
Most of my lucky money is kept by my parents to pay for my future study. I use the rest to buy my favourite storybooks and stationery I need at school. Sometimes I also spend a little money on small gifts for my parents.
I think we should use money properly, and never waste it on unimportant things. We should form a good habit of saving money.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，要点类作文写作，一般现在时运用
【点评】
这篇短文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部三个写作要点，内容贴合中学生的真实生活，逻辑层层递进，从收红包的心情到压岁钱的用途再到消费观念的表达衔接自然，没有冗余内容，词数符合要求，传递了正确的消费观和金钱观，是非常规范的同话题写作参考范本。
【难度系数】
0.7
knowledge. Sometimes I spend some money buying some delicious food with my friends. We have a good time enjoying the food. I also use some money to give a hand to children in need.
I try my best to manage my money well. I think it is significant to have good spending habits and we should always save some money for a rainy day.
巩固练习
请根据要点提示写一篇 80 词左右的短文。
要点:1. 我们经常收到来自……的零花钱。
2. 我们应将钱用于……,为什么? 3. 我们需要存钱吗,为什么?
要求:要点齐全,语言通顺,可适当发挥;文中不得出现真实的个人信息和学校信息。
I try my best to manage my money well. I think it is significant to have good spending habits and we should always save some money for a rainy day.
巩固练习
请根据要点提示写一篇 80 词左右的短文。
要点:1. 我们经常收到来自……的零花钱。
2. 我们应将钱用于……,为什么? 3. 我们需要存钱吗,为什么?
要求:要点齐全,语言通顺,可适当发挥;文中不得出现真实的个人信息和学校信息。
We often get some pocket money from our parents and relatives, but how can we make good use of it?
We should make a budget for our pocket money. I think we had better spend money on books.
We can learn a lot from books because knowledge is power. Besides, we can spend our money on our interests, such as music, sports, art and so on.
We are supposed to save some money in our daily life because we never know when we may need it.
It helps us pick up a good habit of making a budget and managing our money.
答案：One possible version:
We often get some pocket money from our parents and relatives, but how can we make good use of it?
We should make a budget for our pocket money. I think we had better spend money on books. We can learn a lot from
books because knowledge is power. Besides, we can spend our money on our interests, such as music, sports, art and so on.
We are supposed to save some money in our daily life because we never know when we may need it. It helps us pick up a good habit of making a budget and managing our money.
⇨ had better do sth 最好做某事
⇨ be supposed to do sth 应该做某事
We often get some pocket money from our parents and relatives, but how can we make good use of it?
We should make a budget for our pocket money. I think we had better spend money on books. We can learn a lot from
books because knowledge is power. Besides, we can spend our money on our interests, such as music, sports, art and so on.
We are supposed to save some money in our daily life because we never know when we may need it. It helps us pick up a good habit of making a budget and managing our money.
⇨ had better do sth 最好做某事
⇨ be supposed to do sth 应该做某事
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先第一步先明确写作要求：词数80左右，必须覆盖全部3个要点，不能出现真实个人、学校信息。首先梳理行文逻辑：首先开篇先点明零花钱的常见来源，自然引出“如何合理使用零花钱”的核心话题；接下来第二部分对应第二个要点，列举零花钱的合理用途，同时补充对应的原因，让内容更饱满；最后对应第三个要点，明确给出“需要存钱”的结论，解释背后的意义，完成全部要点的覆盖。写作过程中可以用上题干表格里给出的高级表达替换简单的初级词汇，用上提示的加分句型，用连接词串联内容，避免零散简单句堆砌，保证行文流畅自然。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本文属于提纲类议论文，使用第一人称复数，整体时态为一般现在时，严格控制词数在80左右，确保三个要点无遗漏。
2. 搭建行文框架：
① 开篇引入：直接点明我们经常从父母和亲戚处获得零花钱，顺势抛出“如何充分利用零花钱”的讨论主题，开门见山。
② 主体第一部分：对应第二个要点，先提出要为零花钱做预算，列举“花钱买书获取知识、花钱发展兴趣爱好”两个合理用途，分别说明对应的好处，逻辑清晰。
③ 主体第二部分：对应第三个要点，明确提出日常生活中应该存一部分零花钱，解释原因：我们无法预知什么时候会有突发用钱需求，同时存钱也能帮助我们养成做预算、管理钱财的好习惯，完成全部要点的输出。
3. 润色优化：使用had better do sth、be supposed to do sth等高频加分句型，搭配besides等连接词衔接内容，让表达更地道流畅。
【答案】
One possible version:
We often get some pocket money from our parents and relatives, but how can we make good use of it?
We should make a budget for our pocket money. I think we had better spend money on books. We can learn a lot from books because knowledge is power. Besides, we can spend our money on our interests, such as music, sports, art and so on.
We are supposed to save some money in our daily life because we never know when we may need it. It helps us pick up a good habit of making a budget and managing our money.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作；高级词汇替换；常用句型应用
【点评】
本题围绕学生熟悉的“零花钱使用”话题展开，既考察学生整合写作要点、组织连贯语句的基础写作能力，也引导学生将日常积累的高级表达、加分句型灵活运用到写作中，避免简单句堆砌，同时渗透了正确的消费理财观念，兼具知识性和思想引导性。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题，首先第一步先明确写作要求：词数80左右，必须覆盖全部3个要点，不能出现真实个人、学校信息。首先梳理行文逻辑：首先开篇先点明零花钱的常见来源，自然引出“如何合理使用零花钱”的核心话题；接下来第二部分对应第二个要点，列举零花钱的合理用途，同时补充对应的原因，让内容更饱满；最后对应第三个要点，明确给出“需要存钱”的结论，解释背后的意义，完成全部要点的覆盖。写作过程中可以用上题干表格里给出的高级表达替换简单的初级词汇，用上提示的加分句型，用连接词串联内容，避免零散简单句堆砌，保证行文流畅自然。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本文属于提纲类议论文，使用第一人称复数，整体时态为一般现在时，严格控制词数在80左右，确保三个要点无遗漏。
2. 搭建行文框架：
① 开篇引入：直接点明我们经常从父母和亲戚处获得零花钱，顺势抛出“如何充分利用零花钱”的讨论主题，开门见山。
② 主体第一部分：对应第二个要点，先提出要为零花钱做预算，列举“花钱买书获取知识、花钱发展兴趣爱好”两个合理用途，分别说明对应的好处，逻辑清晰。
③ 主体第二部分：对应第三个要点，明确提出日常生活中应该存一部分零花钱，解释原因：我们无法预知什么时候会有突发用钱需求，同时存钱也能帮助我们养成做预算、管理钱财的好习惯，完成全部要点的输出。
3. 润色优化：使用had better do sth、be supposed to do sth等高频加分句型，搭配besides等连接词衔接内容，让表达更地道流畅。
【答案】
One possible version:
We often get some pocket money from our parents and relatives, but how can we make good use of it?
We should make a budget for our pocket money. I think we had better spend money on books. We can learn a lot from books because knowledge is power. Besides, we can spend our money on our interests, such as music, sports, art and so on.
We are supposed to save some money in our daily life because we never know when we may need it. It helps us pick up a good habit of making a budget and managing our money.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作；高级词汇替换；常用句型应用
【点评】
本题围绕学生熟悉的“零花钱使用”话题展开，既考察学生整合写作要点、组织连贯语句的基础写作能力，也引导学生将日常积累的高级表达、加分句型灵活运用到写作中，避免简单句堆砌，同时渗透了正确的消费理财观念，兼具知识性和思想引导性。
【难度系数】
0.6