典型例题
假如你是李华,请根据表格内容,写一封70词左右的英文电子邮件给你的美国朋友汤姆,向他介绍你一天的生活。
思路点拨
1. 审体裁——英文电子邮件类应用文。
2. 审主题——向美国朋友汤姆介绍自己一天的生活作息。
3. 审时态——一般现在时。
4. 审篇幅——词数控制在70个左右,语句通顺、逻辑连贯。
范文欣赏
Dear Tom,
Thank you for writing to me. I would like to share something about my life.
I get up at 6:00 in the morning. At 6:40, I have breakfast. Then I do morning exercises at 7:00. I have lessons from 8:25 to 11:50 every morning. Then I have lunch and rest. From 14:00 to 16:35, I have lessons again. Then I play sports. At 17:40, I go home. There are times when I spend 30 minutes watching TV before having dinner. I have dinner at 18:30 and then I have a rest. At 19: 00, I do my homework. I usually go to sleep at 21:30.
That's my life. What about yours? Please email me soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
假如你是李华,请根据表格内容,写一封70词左右的英文电子邮件给你的美国朋友汤姆,向他介绍你一天的生活。
思路点拨
1. 审体裁——英文电子邮件类应用文。
2. 审主题——向美国朋友汤姆介绍自己一天的生活作息。
3. 审时态——一般现在时。
4. 审篇幅——词数控制在70个左右,语句通顺、逻辑连贯。
范文欣赏
Dear Tom,
Thank you for writing to me. I would like to share something about my life.
I get up at 6:00 in the morning. At 6:40, I have breakfast. Then I do morning exercises at 7:00. I have lessons from 8:25 to 11:50 every morning. Then I have lunch and rest. From 14:00 to 16:35, I have lessons again. Then I play sports. At 17:40, I go home. There are times when I spend 30 minutes watching TV before having dinner. I have dinner at 18:30 and then I have a rest. At 19: 00, I do my homework. I usually go to sleep at 21:30.
That's my life. What about yours? Please email me soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
答案：Dear Tom,
I'd like to tell you something about my daily life. I get up at 6 a.m., have breakfast at 6:40 and do morning exercises at 7. I have lessons from 8:25 to 11:50, then have lunch and rest. After afternoon classes, I play sports, go home at 17:40. I finish my homework before 21:30 and go to bed.
What about your day? Email me soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
I'd like to tell you something about my daily life. I get up at 6 a.m., have breakfast at 6:40 and do morning exercises at 7. I have lessons from 8:25 to 11:50, then have lunch and rest. After afternoon classes, I play sports, go home at 17:40. I finish my homework before 21:30 and go to bed.
What about your day? Email me soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先按要求完成四步审题：1. 明确体裁是写给好友的英文电子邮件，要符合邮件的基础格式；2. 确定写作核心是介绍自己的日常作息，所有内容都要围绕一天的活动展开，避免跑题；3. 确定描述常规日常活动要用一般现在时，注意谓语动词的正确形式；4. 明确词数要求70左右，不需要堆砌复杂长句，按照从早到晚的时间顺序串联所有给定的作息要点，写完后核对要点完整性、时态正确性，最后补充收尾询问对方情况的内容即可完成写作。
【解析】
步骤1：搭建邮件基础框架，开头写称呼Dear Tom，末尾补充落款Yours, Li Hua，符合英文邮件格式要求。
步骤2：开篇点明写作目的，用简洁的句子引出要介绍自己日常的主题，避免冗余表述。
步骤3：按照时间先后顺序，依次串联起床、吃早饭、晨练、上午上课、午休、下午课后运动、回家、完成作业、睡觉的所有核心活动，用连词衔接零散的动作，让语句连贯流畅。
步骤4：结尾补充询问对方日常、邀请回信的内容，调整语句精简冗余部分，将总词数控制在70左右，通读检查确认全文字数符合要求、时态统一为一般现在时，无语法错误。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
I'd like to tell you something about my daily life. I get up at 6 a.m., have breakfast at 6:40 and do morning exercises at 7. I have lessons from 8:25 to 11:50, then have lunch and rest. After afternoon classes, I play sports, go home at 17:40. I finish my homework before 21:30 and go to bed.
What about your day? Email me soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
1. 英文邮件格式
2. 一般现在时用法
3. 日常话题写作
【点评】
本篇参考作文逻辑清晰，严格按照时间顺序排布作息事件，完整覆盖所有核心写作要点，语句简洁流畅，词数完全符合70词左右的要求，没有多余的冗余表述，非常贴合初中阶段基础应用文写作的评分标准，学生练习这类写作时优先梳理时间线串联要点，就能轻松避免逻辑混乱、要点遗漏的问题。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题首先按要求完成四步审题：1. 明确体裁是写给好友的英文电子邮件，要符合邮件的基础格式；2. 确定写作核心是介绍自己的日常作息，所有内容都要围绕一天的活动展开，避免跑题；3. 确定描述常规日常活动要用一般现在时，注意谓语动词的正确形式；4. 明确词数要求70左右，不需要堆砌复杂长句，按照从早到晚的时间顺序串联所有给定的作息要点，写完后核对要点完整性、时态正确性，最后补充收尾询问对方情况的内容即可完成写作。
【解析】
步骤1：搭建邮件基础框架，开头写称呼Dear Tom，末尾补充落款Yours, Li Hua，符合英文邮件格式要求。
步骤2：开篇点明写作目的，用简洁的句子引出要介绍自己日常的主题，避免冗余表述。
步骤3：按照时间先后顺序，依次串联起床、吃早饭、晨练、上午上课、午休、下午课后运动、回家、完成作业、睡觉的所有核心活动，用连词衔接零散的动作，让语句连贯流畅。
步骤4：结尾补充询问对方日常、邀请回信的内容，调整语句精简冗余部分，将总词数控制在70左右，通读检查确认全文字数符合要求、时态统一为一般现在时，无语法错误。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
I'd like to tell you something about my daily life. I get up at 6 a.m., have breakfast at 6:40 and do morning exercises at 7. I have lessons from 8:25 to 11:50, then have lunch and rest. After afternoon classes, I play sports, go home at 17:40. I finish my homework before 21:30 and go to bed.
What about your day? Email me soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
1. 英文邮件格式
2. 一般现在时用法
3. 日常话题写作
【点评】
本篇参考作文逻辑清晰，严格按照时间顺序排布作息事件，完整覆盖所有核心写作要点，语句简洁流畅，词数完全符合70词左右的要求，没有多余的冗余表述，非常贴合初中阶段基础应用文写作的评分标准，学生练习这类写作时优先梳理时间线串联要点，就能轻松避免逻辑混乱、要点遗漏的问题。
【难度系数】
0.7
巩固练习
假如你是李佳,你的英国笔友 Peter 想知道你的学校生活是怎样的。请你用英语给他写一封 70 词左右的邮件,介绍一下你的学校生活。
提示:1. 每天七节课,最喜欢英语课。2. 是学校足球队成员,周二与周四下午练习足球;喜欢读书,经常去图书馆借书。3. 有很多朋友,经常一起玩耍、聊天。
Dear Peter,
I would like to tell you about my school life.
I always have a good time at school. Please tell me something about your school life.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jia
假如你是李佳,你的英国笔友 Peter 想知道你的学校生活是怎样的。请你用英语给他写一封 70 词左右的邮件,介绍一下你的学校生活。
提示:1. 每天七节课,最喜欢英语课。2. 是学校足球队成员,周二与周四下午练习足球;喜欢读书,经常去图书馆借书。3. 有很多朋友,经常一起玩耍、聊天。
Dear Peter,
I would like to tell you about my school life.
I always have a good time at school. Please tell me something about your school life.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jia
答案：One possible version:
Dear Peter,
I would like to tell you about my school life.
I go to school from Monday to Friday. We have seven lessons every day. My favourite subject is English. I am a member of the school football team. We practise playing football on Tuesday afternoon and Thursday afternoon. I like reading. I often borrow books from the library because I can get a lot of knowledge from books. I also have many friends here and we usually play and chat with each other after lunch.
I always have a good time at school. Please tell me something about your school life.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jia
→ be a member of...
→ practise doing sth; on+具体某一天的上午、下午或晚上
→ borrow sth from...
→ chat with sb
Dear Peter,
I would like to tell you about my school life.
I go to school from Monday to Friday. We have seven lessons every day. My favourite subject is English. I am a member of the school football team. We practise playing football on Tuesday afternoon and Thursday afternoon. I like reading. I often borrow books from the library because I can get a lot of knowledge from books. I also have many friends here and we usually play and chat with each other after lunch.
I always have a good time at school. Please tell me something about your school life.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jia
→ be a member of...
→ practise doing sth; on+具体某一天的上午、下午或晚上
→ borrow sth from...
→ chat with sb
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：身份是李佳，写给笔友介绍自己的校园生活，词数70左右，必须覆盖题干给出的全部3个提示要点。我们可以直接保留题干已经给出的邮件首尾内容，只需要填充中间的主体部分：先介绍每日的课程安排，点明自己最喜欢英语；接着依次介绍自己的足球社团活动、阅读爱好；最后介绍自己和朋友的校园日常，串联内容的时候选用学过的基础短语，保证语法正确、语句通顺，控制总词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 第一步：梳理所有得分要点，确保3个提示信息全部不遗漏：①每日7节课，最爱英语课；②校足球队成员，周二、周四下午练足球，爱读书常去图书馆借书；③有很多朋友，经常一起玩耍聊天。
2. 第二步：确定整体时态，介绍日常校园生活统一用一般现在时，避免时态混乱。
3. 第三步：用所学基础短语串联内容，比如be a member of（是……的成员）、practise doing sth（练习做某事）、borrow sth from…（从……借某物）、chat with sb（和某人聊天），注意表示具体某天下午要搭配介词on，规避语法错误。
4. 第四步：把写好的主体内容填入题干给出的邮件框架中，调整语句流畅度，核查词数符合70词左右的要求。
【答案】
Dear Peter,
I would like to tell you about my school life.
I go to school from Monday to Friday. We have seven lessons every day. My favourite subject is English. I am a member of the school football team. We practise playing football on Tuesday afternoon and Thursday afternoon. I like reading. I often borrow books from the library because I can get a lot of knowledge from books. I also have many friends here and we usually play and chat with each other after lunch.
I always have a good time at school. Please tell me something about your school life.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jia
【知识点】
邮件应用文写作；一般现在时；固定短语搭配
【点评】
本题属于基础的校园话题写作，题干给出的提示信息非常明确，不需要学生自行做过多额外拓展，只需要将给出的要点用正确的英语表达连贯整合即可，适合用来巩固校园相关的写作常用表达，夯实基础写作能力。
【难度系数】
0.8
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：身份是李佳，写给笔友介绍自己的校园生活，词数70左右，必须覆盖题干给出的全部3个提示要点。我们可以直接保留题干已经给出的邮件首尾内容，只需要填充中间的主体部分：先介绍每日的课程安排，点明自己最喜欢英语；接着依次介绍自己的足球社团活动、阅读爱好；最后介绍自己和朋友的校园日常，串联内容的时候选用学过的基础短语，保证语法正确、语句通顺，控制总词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 第一步：梳理所有得分要点，确保3个提示信息全部不遗漏：①每日7节课，最爱英语课；②校足球队成员，周二、周四下午练足球，爱读书常去图书馆借书；③有很多朋友，经常一起玩耍聊天。
2. 第二步：确定整体时态，介绍日常校园生活统一用一般现在时，避免时态混乱。
3. 第三步：用所学基础短语串联内容，比如be a member of（是……的成员）、practise doing sth（练习做某事）、borrow sth from…（从……借某物）、chat with sb（和某人聊天），注意表示具体某天下午要搭配介词on，规避语法错误。
4. 第四步：把写好的主体内容填入题干给出的邮件框架中，调整语句流畅度，核查词数符合70词左右的要求。
【答案】
Dear Peter,
I would like to tell you about my school life.
I go to school from Monday to Friday. We have seven lessons every day. My favourite subject is English. I am a member of the school football team. We practise playing football on Tuesday afternoon and Thursday afternoon. I like reading. I often borrow books from the library because I can get a lot of knowledge from books. I also have many friends here and we usually play and chat with each other after lunch.
I always have a good time at school. Please tell me something about your school life.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jia
【知识点】
邮件应用文写作；一般现在时；固定短语搭配
【点评】
本题属于基础的校园话题写作，题干给出的提示信息非常明确，不需要学生自行做过多额外拓展，只需要将给出的要点用正确的英语表达连贯整合即可，适合用来巩固校园相关的写作常用表达，夯实基础写作能力。
【难度系数】
0.8