[润色成篇]
初级范文
We should do chores at home
Now many students don't like doing chores at home. There are mainly two reasons. ① They think it's their parents' job to do chores at home. They think doing chores takes up their time for study.
② But I think we should help do chores at home. Our parents work hard every day and often feel tired after work. I often do chores at home, such as folding the clothes, sweeping the floor, and washing vegetables. Doing these small tasks doesn't take much time ③ but can help my parents a lot. ④ It's a good way to relax after long hours of study.
In short, doing chores is a meaningful activity. Let's start doing chores at home right now!
高分范文
We should do chores at home
Now many students don't like doing chores at home. There are mainly two reasons. ①One is that they think it's their parents' job to do chores at home. The other is that they think doing chores takes up their time for study.
②But I think
sweeping the floor, and washing vegetables. Doing these small tasks doesn't take much time ③but can make a big difference to my parents. ④What's more, it's a good way to relax after long hours of study.
In short, doing chores is a meaningful activity. Let's start doing chores at home right now!
名师指导:
一、高分范文中,①使用“One is that…The other is that…”结构升格,使用that引导的表语从句,使句式更高级;②使用“it is+n. +to do sth”结构升格,使句式更加丰富;③使用短语make a big difference代替常见词汇help,使文章词汇更丰富;④使用“What's more”衔接上文,能体现语言组织能力,使文章层次更清晰。
二、两篇范文均遵循“提出现象→分析原因→表达观点→阐述理由(结合事例)→总结号召”的议论文经典框架,结构清晰、层次分明,全文逻辑闭环,观点积极正向,既强调家庭责任,又关注自身成长。
初级范文
We should do chores at home
Now many students don't like doing chores at home. There are mainly two reasons. ① They think it's their parents' job to do chores at home. They think doing chores takes up their time for study.
② But I think we should help do chores at home. Our parents work hard every day and often feel tired after work. I often do chores at home, such as folding the clothes, sweeping the floor, and washing vegetables. Doing these small tasks doesn't take much time ③ but can help my parents a lot. ④ It's a good way to relax after long hours of study.
In short, doing chores is a meaningful activity. Let's start doing chores at home right now!
高分范文
We should do chores at home
Now many students don't like doing chores at home. There are mainly two reasons. ①One is that they think it's their parents' job to do chores at home. The other is that they think doing chores takes up their time for study.
②But I think
it is our duty to do chores at home
(使用“it is+n. +to do sth”升格) because our parents work hard every day and often feel tired after work. I often do chores at home, like folding the clothes, In short, doing chores is a meaningful activity. Let's start doing chores at home right now!
名师指导:
一、高分范文中,①使用“One is that…The other is that…”结构升格,使用that引导的表语从句,使句式更高级;②使用“it is+n. +to do sth”结构升格,使句式更加丰富;③使用短语make a big difference代替常见词汇help,使文章词汇更丰富;④使用“What's more”衔接上文,能体现语言组织能力,使文章层次更清晰。
二、两篇范文均遵循“提出现象→分析原因→表达观点→阐述理由(结合事例)→总结号召”的议论文经典框架,结构清晰、层次分明,全文逻辑闭环,观点积极正向,既强调家庭责任,又关注自身成长。
答案:② it is our duty to do chores at home
做家务是青少年应尽的义务。假设你是李明,是阳光中学一名八年级的学生,请你以“My Experience of Doing Housework”为题写一篇英语短文,介绍你平时所做的家务及感受。
内容要点:1.你做家务的原因;
2.你平时所做的家务(至少举一个例子);
3.你对做家务的感受。
写作要求:1.包含上述三个内容要点,可适当发挥;
2.语句通顺,意思连贯,语法正确,书写规范,书面整洁;
3.词数80左右。
书写区域 Good writing makes your article better.
My Experience of Doing Housework
(请把作文写到自己的练习本上吧!)
内容要点:1.你做家务的原因;
2.你平时所做的家务(至少举一个例子);
3.你对做家务的感受。
写作要求:1.包含上述三个内容要点,可适当发挥;
2.语句通顺,意思连贯,语法正确,书写规范,书面整洁;
3.词数80左右。
书写区域 Good writing makes your article better.
My Experience of Doing Housework
(请把作文写到自己的练习本上吧!)
答案:写作指导与评价请扫描"详解详析二维码"
One possible version:
My Experience of Doing Housework
My name is Li Ming. I believe that doing housework is a necessary part of our lives. As a student in Grade Eight, I do housework for several reasons. Firstly, it helps me become more independent. Secondly, it shows my love and respect to my parents.
I usually do the dishes after meals. It's not difficult, but it can help my parents relax. Sometimes, I also sweep the floor to keep our home clean.
Doing housework makes me happy. It gives me a strong feeling of achievement and makes me understand how hard my parents work. I will keep doing it to help my family!
One possible version:
My Experience of Doing Housework
My name is Li Ming. I believe that doing housework is a necessary part of our lives. As a student in Grade Eight, I do housework for several reasons. Firstly, it helps me become more independent. Secondly, it shows my love and respect to my parents.
I usually do the dishes after meals. It's not difficult, but it can help my parents relax. Sometimes, I also sweep the floor to keep our home clean.
Doing housework makes me happy. It gives me a strong feeling of achievement and makes me understand how hard my parents work. I will keep doing it to help my family!