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初级范文
A Special Friend
I have a special friend. He's Zhang Yan. ①He's tall and thin. He has big eyes and a round face.
Both of us are interested in sports, and we often play football together after school. ②We both study hard. Zhang Yan is better at English, ③so he always helps with my English. However, we're different in some ways. I'm short but he is quite tall. I'm more outgoing and funnier while he is quieter and more serious.
I think he is a special friend because he is not afraid to give his opinions, especially when I'm making a mistake. And he always helps me become better, and I've made great progress with his help. ④I am lucky to have such a special friend in my life!
高分范文
A Special Friend
I have a special friend. He's Zhang Yan. ①He's tall and thin with big bright eyes and a round face.
Both of us are interested in sports, and we often play football together after school. ②We're also hard-working in studies. Zhang Yan is better at English, ③
I think he is a special friend because he is not afraid to give his opinions, especially when I'm making a mistake. And he always helps me become better, and I've made great progress with his help. ④
名师指导:
一、高分范文中,①使用介词短语作定语将两个简单句合并在一起,使表述更加精练简洁; ②使用含有形容词的表述,体现了语言的丰富性;③使用“be ready to do sth”结构替换了常用的表达方式,使语言更丰富;④使用how引导的感叹句升格,强化情感,提升表达力。
二、两篇范文均遵循“开篇点题引人物→多维刻画(外貌+共性+差异)展特质→深化主题抒情感”的人物类作文框架,均围绕“介绍特别的朋友 Zhang Yan”展开,紧扣“特别的”,传递真挚友谊。文章结构严谨,首尾呼应,要点全面。
初级范文
A Special Friend
I have a special friend. He's Zhang Yan. ①He's tall and thin. He has big eyes and a round face.
Both of us are interested in sports, and we often play football together after school. ②We both study hard. Zhang Yan is better at English, ③so he always helps with my English. However, we're different in some ways. I'm short but he is quite tall. I'm more outgoing and funnier while he is quieter and more serious.
I think he is a special friend because he is not afraid to give his opinions, especially when I'm making a mistake. And he always helps me become better, and I've made great progress with his help. ④I am lucky to have such a special friend in my life!
高分范文
A Special Friend
I have a special friend. He's Zhang Yan. ①He's tall and thin with big bright eyes and a round face.
Both of us are interested in sports, and we often play football together after school. ②We're also hard-working in studies. Zhang Yan is better at English, ③
so he's always ready to help me with my English
(使用 be ready to do sth 升格). However, we're different in some ways. I'm short while he's quite tall. As for personalities, I'm more outgoing and funnier while he is quieter and more serious.I think he is a special friend because he is not afraid to give his opinions, especially when I'm making a mistake. And he always helps me become better, and I've made great progress with his help. ④
How lucky I am to have such a special friend in my life!
(使用 how 引导的感叹句升格)名师指导:
一、高分范文中,①使用介词短语作定语将两个简单句合并在一起,使表述更加精练简洁; ②使用含有形容词的表述,体现了语言的丰富性;③使用“be ready to do sth”结构替换了常用的表达方式,使语言更丰富;④使用how引导的感叹句升格,强化情感,提升表达力。
二、两篇范文均遵循“开篇点题引人物→多维刻画(外貌+共性+差异)展特质→深化主题抒情感”的人物类作文框架,均围绕“介绍特别的朋友 Zhang Yan”展开,紧扣“特别的”,传递真挚友谊。文章结构严谨,首尾呼应,要点全面。
答案：③ so he's always ready to help me with my English
④ How lucky I am to have such a special friend in my life!
④ How lucky I am to have such a special friend in my life!
小试身手
友谊就像花朵，在岁月里静静绽放。友谊就像风帆，在时间的长河里让我们远航。朋友是一种默契，是一种温暖，是迷茫时的明灯，是孤独时的陪伴。我们应该好好珍惜身边的朋友。假如你是李华，你们学校将举办以“珍惜友谊(Value Our Friendship)”为主题的英语演讲比赛。请你根据以下提示用英语写一篇80—100词的演讲稿。
提示：
1. Who is your best friend?
2. What similarities or differences do you and your best friend have?
3. What should you do to value your friendship?
书写区域 Good writing makes your article better.
友谊就像花朵，在岁月里静静绽放。友谊就像风帆，在时间的长河里让我们远航。朋友是一种默契，是一种温暖，是迷茫时的明灯，是孤独时的陪伴。我们应该好好珍惜身边的朋友。假如你是李华，你们学校将举办以“珍惜友谊(Value Our Friendship)”为主题的英语演讲比赛。请你根据以下提示用英语写一篇80—100词的演讲稿。
提示：
1. Who is your best friend?
2. What similarities or differences do you and your best friend have?
3. What should you do to value your friendship?
书写区域 Good writing makes your article better.
答案：写作指导与评价请扫描"详解详析二维码"
One possible version:
Good morning, everyone! Friendship plays an important role in our life. Now let me tell you something about my best friend.
My best friend is Tom. He has black eyes and black hair. He is taller and more outgoing than me. I am better at English than him but he runs faster than me. We both like playing basketball. Both he and I like sports shows. Differences are not important in a friendship. We can respect and learn from each other. Although we have some differences, we are good friends. When we have problems, we care about and help each other. We always encourage each other to get good grades. I think Tom is a true friend. How do you like him?
That's all. Thanks for listening!
One possible version:
Good morning, everyone! Friendship plays an important role in our life. Now let me tell you something about my best friend.
My best friend is Tom. He has black eyes and black hair. He is taller and more outgoing than me. I am better at English than him but he runs faster than me. We both like playing basketball. Both he and I like sports shows. Differences are not important in a friendship. We can respect and learn from each other. Although we have some differences, we are good friends. When we have problems, we care about and help each other. We always encourage each other to get good grades. I think Tom is a true friend. How do you like him?
That's all. Thanks for listening!