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初级范文
Dear teachers and students,
My name is Li Ming. I am so happy to be here to talk about wild animals with you.
①The animals are pandas. They are black and white, and they are very cute. They mainly live in the forests of Sichuan, China, and bamboo leaves and shoots are their favourite food. As a symbol of China, pandas not only represent friendship but also ②keep the balance of nature. However, they are in danger now. People cut down too many trees, so pandas don't have enough space to live in or enough food to eat.
③We should protect pandas. We should stop cutting down trees and protect their living areas. What's more, we can call on more people to protect them. Let's work together to save them.
Thank you!
高分范文
Dear teachers and students,
My name is Li Ming. I am so happy to be here to talk about wild animals with you.
①The animals are pandas, one of the most lovely animals in the world. They are black and white, and they are very cute. They mainly live in the forests of Sichuan, China, and bamboo leaves and shoots are their favourite food. As a symbol of China, pandas not only represent friendship but also
③
Thank you!
名师指导:
一、高分范文中,①运用“one of+the+形容词最高级+可数名词复数”结构升格,让主题定位更突出,说明了熊猫的特殊性;②使用短语“play an important role in”升格,让表达更精准,提升了主题深度;③使用“in order to”结构作目的状语升格,使文章逻辑更清晰,符合演讲稿“呼吁人们行动”的语境。
二、两篇范文均遵循“开篇点题→描述特征→点明问题→提出建议→呼吁行动”的经典框架,首尾呼应,条理分明,内容重点突出。
初级范文
Dear teachers and students,
My name is Li Ming. I am so happy to be here to talk about wild animals with you.
①The animals are pandas. They are black and white, and they are very cute. They mainly live in the forests of Sichuan, China, and bamboo leaves and shoots are their favourite food. As a symbol of China, pandas not only represent friendship but also ②keep the balance of nature. However, they are in danger now. People cut down too many trees, so pandas don't have enough space to live in or enough food to eat.
③We should protect pandas. We should stop cutting down trees and protect their living areas. What's more, we can call on more people to protect them. Let's work together to save them.
Thank you!
高分范文
Dear teachers and students,
My name is Li Ming. I am so happy to be here to talk about wild animals with you.
①The animals are pandas, one of the most lovely animals in the world. They are black and white, and they are very cute. They mainly live in the forests of Sichuan, China, and bamboo leaves and shoots are their favourite food. As a symbol of China, pandas not only represent friendship but also
play an important role in keeping the balance of nature
(使用 play an important role in 升格). However, they are in danger now. People cut down too many trees, so pandas don't have enough space to live in or enough food to eat.③
In order to protect pandas
(使用 in order to 结构升格), we should stop cutting down trees and protect their living areas. What's more, we can call on more people to protect them. Let's work together to give pandas a safe and happy home.Thank you!
名师指导:
一、高分范文中,①运用“one of+the+形容词最高级+可数名词复数”结构升格,让主题定位更突出,说明了熊猫的特殊性;②使用短语“play an important role in”升格,让表达更精准,提升了主题深度;③使用“in order to”结构作目的状语升格,使文章逻辑更清晰,符合演讲稿“呼吁人们行动”的语境。
二、两篇范文均遵循“开篇点题→描述特征→点明问题→提出建议→呼吁行动”的经典框架,首尾呼应,条理分明,内容重点突出。
答案：② play an important role in keeping the balance of nature
③ In order to protect pandas
③ In order to protect pandas
小试身手
在本单元，我们学习和了解了世界上诸多神奇的动物和植物，它们和人类相互依存，在生态系统中起着不可或缺的作用。请你根据以下内容提示，以“My Favourite Plant”为题用英语写一篇80词左右的短文，介绍一下自己最喜欢的植物。
提示:1. What's your favourite plant? 2. What does it look like?
3. What's amazing about it? 4. What do you think of it?
要求:1.必须包括所有提示内容，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
2.语句通顺，意思连贯，表达正确；
3.文中不得出现真实的姓名、校名和地名。
参考词汇：blossom 开花 medicine 药物 petal 花瓣
书写区域 Good writing makes your article better.
(请把作文写到自己的练习本上吧！)
在本单元，我们学习和了解了世界上诸多神奇的动物和植物，它们和人类相互依存，在生态系统中起着不可或缺的作用。请你根据以下内容提示，以“My Favourite Plant”为题用英语写一篇80词左右的短文，介绍一下自己最喜欢的植物。
提示:1. What's your favourite plant? 2. What does it look like?
3. What's amazing about it? 4. What do you think of it?
要求:1.必须包括所有提示内容，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
2.语句通顺，意思连贯，表达正确；
3.文中不得出现真实的姓名、校名和地名。
参考词汇：blossom 开花 medicine 药物 petal 花瓣
书写区域 Good writing makes your article better.
(请把作文写到自己的练习本上吧！)
答案：写作指导与评价请扫描“详解详析二维码”
One possible version:
My Favourite Plant
Plants are very important to us. People can breathe fresh air from plants. Of all the plants, my favourite is the rose.
Roses have a wonderful smell. When they blossom, they can make our garden and house lively. Our family is full of love and joy too. I think the rose is one of the most beautiful flowers in the world. Do you know what's amazing about it? It is also a kind of medicine. My mother likes collecting its petals and making tea with them. Roses are a symbol of love. To show love, many people give each other roses during festivals.
I love roses a lot because they make our world colourful. What about you?
One possible version:
My Favourite Plant
Plants are very important to us. People can breathe fresh air from plants. Of all the plants, my favourite is the rose.
Roses have a wonderful smell. When they blossom, they can make our garden and house lively. Our family is full of love and joy too. I think the rose is one of the most beautiful flowers in the world. Do you know what's amazing about it? It is also a kind of medicine. My mother likes collecting its petals and making tea with them. Roses are a symbol of love. To show love, many people give each other roses during festivals.
I love roses a lot because they make our world colourful. What about you?