实战演练
你校八年级学生陈明(Chen Ming)是个热爱运动、乐于助人的男孩，却不幸患上严重的骨骼疾病(bone disease)。他已经一个月没来上学了，急需一台手术恢复健康，但手术费用高昂，其父母仅靠开出租车维生，无力承担。校学生会计划发起公益活动为他筹款，现请你以学生会名义写一封呼吁全校师生伸出援手的公开信。
【要点】1. 介绍陈明的年级、性格特点及患病情况。
2. 阐述困境：说明手术的必要性、具体费用以及其家庭经济状况。
3. 发起行动：设计一项校园公益活动，明确活动的时间、地点。
【要求】1. 结构清晰，须涵盖要点，逻辑连贯。
2. 用词准确，语句通顺。
3. 词数 90 左右。
你校八年级学生陈明(Chen Ming)是个热爱运动、乐于助人的男孩，却不幸患上严重的骨骼疾病(bone disease)。他已经一个月没来上学了，急需一台手术恢复健康，但手术费用高昂，其父母仅靠开出租车维生，无力承担。校学生会计划发起公益活动为他筹款，现请你以学生会名义写一封呼吁全校师生伸出援手的公开信。
【要点】1. 介绍陈明的年级、性格特点及患病情况。
2. 阐述困境：说明手术的必要性、具体费用以及其家庭经济状况。
3. 发起行动：设计一项校园公益活动，明确活动的时间、地点。
【要求】1. 结构清晰，须涵盖要点，逻辑连贯。
2. 用词准确，语句通顺。
3. 词数 90 左右。
One possible version
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can cure him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are organizing a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a. m. to 3 p. m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
答案：One possible version
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can cure him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are organizing a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a. m. to 3 p. m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can cure him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are organizing a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a. m. to 3 p. m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要明确文体是面向全校师生的公益公开信，发文主体是学生会，整体语气要真诚恳切、有号召力。第一步先把题干要求的三个核心要点全部梳理出来，避免遗漏：一是陈明的年级、性格特点、患病缺课情况；二是手术的必要性、高昂费用、家庭经济困难的现状；三是设计的校园公益活动的具体时间、地点。接下来搭建行文逻辑：开篇直接点明求助事由，接着依次介绍陈明的相关情况、他面临的现实困境，再公布筹款活动的详细信息，最后发出呼吁收尾，补上公开信对应的称呼和落款，调整语句让表达连贯，把词数控制在90左右即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 格式搭建：按照公开信的规范，开头写面向全体师生的称呼Dear all，结尾标注发文主体落款The Students' Union，符合应用文格式要求。
2. 内容分层填充：
① 开篇直接引出求助对象陈明，点明他是八年级学生，身患严重骨骼疾病、已经缺课一个月的基本情况；
② 接着说明手术是治愈他的必要手段，但费用高达30多万，他的父母以开出租车为生完全无力承担，点明不及时手术的风险，唤起大家的共情；
③ 公布学生会筹备的校园筹款活动：举办校园书展筹款，明确活动时间为下周六上午10点到下午3点，地点在学校图书馆，信息清晰明确；
④ 最后用有号召力的语句收尾，呼吁大家伸出援手帮助陈明。
3. 润色调整：全程使用符合初中阶段的准确表达，修正语法错误，调整语句衔接，保证所有要点全部覆盖，词数符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can cure him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are organizing a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a. m. to 3 p. m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
【知识点】
英文公开信写作，要点整合表达
【点评】
本题是贴合校园场景的应用文写作，既考察了学生对书信类文体格式的掌握能力，也锻炼了学生整合给定信息、用通顺连贯的英文传递呼吁类内容的表达能力，参考范文完全覆盖所有题干要求的要点，设计的校园书展活动贴合学生日常场景，语气真诚有感染力，词数符合题干要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先要明确文体是面向全校师生的公益公开信，发文主体是学生会，整体语气要真诚恳切、有号召力。第一步先把题干要求的三个核心要点全部梳理出来，避免遗漏：一是陈明的年级、性格特点、患病缺课情况；二是手术的必要性、高昂费用、家庭经济困难的现状；三是设计的校园公益活动的具体时间、地点。接下来搭建行文逻辑：开篇直接点明求助事由，接着依次介绍陈明的相关情况、他面临的现实困境，再公布筹款活动的详细信息，最后发出呼吁收尾，补上公开信对应的称呼和落款，调整语句让表达连贯，把词数控制在90左右即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 格式搭建：按照公开信的规范，开头写面向全体师生的称呼Dear all，结尾标注发文主体落款The Students' Union，符合应用文格式要求。
2. 内容分层填充：
① 开篇直接引出求助对象陈明，点明他是八年级学生，身患严重骨骼疾病、已经缺课一个月的基本情况；
② 接着说明手术是治愈他的必要手段，但费用高达30多万，他的父母以开出租车为生完全无力承担，点明不及时手术的风险，唤起大家的共情；
③ 公布学生会筹备的校园筹款活动：举办校园书展筹款，明确活动时间为下周六上午10点到下午3点，地点在学校图书馆，信息清晰明确；
④ 最后用有号召力的语句收尾，呼吁大家伸出援手帮助陈明。
3. 润色调整：全程使用符合初中阶段的准确表达，修正语法错误，调整语句衔接，保证所有要点全部覆盖，词数符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can cure him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are organizing a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a. m. to 3 p. m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
【知识点】
英文公开信写作，要点整合表达
【点评】
本题是贴合校园场景的应用文写作，既考察了学生对书信类文体格式的掌握能力，也锻炼了学生整合给定信息、用通顺连贯的英文传递呼吁类内容的表达能力，参考范文完全覆盖所有题干要求的要点，设计的校园书展活动贴合学生日常场景，语气真诚有感染力，词数符合题干要求。
【难度系数】
0.6