你校八年级学生陈明Chen Ming是个热爱运动、乐于助人的男孩,却不幸患上严重的骨骼疾病bone disease,从上个月开始就一直没来学校了。他急需一台手术恢复健康,但手术费用高昂,其父母仅靠开出租车维生,无力承担。校学生会计划发起公益活动为他筹款,现请你以学生会名义写一封呼吁全校师生伸出援手的公开信。
【要点】
【要求】1.结构清晰,需涵盖所有要点,逻辑连贯。
2.用词准确、语句通顺,可适当发挥。
3.90词左右。
【要点】
【要求】1.结构清晰,需涵盖所有要点,逻辑连贯。
2.用词准确、语句通顺,可适当发挥。
3.90词左右。
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard-working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can heal him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are planning to organize a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a. m. to 3 p. m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
答案：One possible version:
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard-working Grade 8 student, needs our
help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and
has been absent from school since last month. A necessary
operation can heal him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot
afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation,
Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are
planning to organize a book fair to raise money next Saturday
from 10 a. m. to 3 p. m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of
us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard-working Grade 8 student, needs our
help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and
has been absent from school since last month. A necessary
operation can heal him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot
afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation,
Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are
planning to organize a book fair to raise money next Saturday
from 10 a. m. to 3 p. m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of
us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要明确写作体裁是校学生会面向全校师生发布的公益募捐公开信，接下来我们要逐一梳理所有需要覆盖的要点，避免遗漏：首先开篇引出求助对象陈明，先介绍他的基础信息：八年级学生，性格热心、热爱运动，不幸患上严重骨骼疾病，从上个月开始就没来上学；接下来讲清他面临的困境：手术是恢复健康的必要条件，但手术费用高昂，他的父母仅靠开出租车维生，完全承担不起这笔开销；最后明确设计的公益筹款活动，标注清楚活动的具体时间、地点，最后发出真诚的呼吁号召大家伸出援手。写作时注意使用贴合场景的真诚语气，控制总词数在90词左右，搭配准确的时态，保证逻辑连贯即可。
【解析】
1. 格式搭建：按照公开信的规范格式，开头用Dear all称呼全体师生，结尾标注落款校学生会The Students' Union。
2. 内容分层：
第一层：开篇直接点明核心主题，引出需要帮助的八年级学生陈明，简要介绍他患病后长期休学的现状。
第二层：说明陈明的困境：手术是他恢复健康的必要条件，总费用高达30余万元，而他的父母都是出租车司机，无力承担这笔巨额费用，不做手术他的健康会面临极大风险。
第三层：介绍策划的公益活动：计划下周六上午10点到下午3点在学校图书馆举办旧书义卖活动为他筹款，最后发出呼吁，号召全体师生参与，一起帮陈明渡过难关。
3. 语句润色：用合适的衔接词串联内容，保证行文流畅自然，没有语法错误，符合初中英语写作的表达要求，词数符合90词左右的规定。
【答案】
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard-working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can heal him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan. Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are planning to organize a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a. m. to 3 p. m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
【知识点】
公开信写作，现在完成时，公益话题表达
【点评】
本题是贴近校园生活的应用文写作题，既考察学生对英文书信格式的掌握能力，也考察学生整合给定信息、连贯表达的能力，同时渗透了热心助人的公益引导。写作时要注意覆盖所有给定要点，不要遗漏活动时间、地点等关键信息，同时控制篇幅符合词数要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先要明确写作体裁是校学生会面向全校师生发布的公益募捐公开信，接下来我们要逐一梳理所有需要覆盖的要点，避免遗漏：首先开篇引出求助对象陈明，先介绍他的基础信息：八年级学生，性格热心、热爱运动，不幸患上严重骨骼疾病，从上个月开始就没来上学；接下来讲清他面临的困境：手术是恢复健康的必要条件，但手术费用高昂，他的父母仅靠开出租车维生，完全承担不起这笔开销；最后明确设计的公益筹款活动，标注清楚活动的具体时间、地点，最后发出真诚的呼吁号召大家伸出援手。写作时注意使用贴合场景的真诚语气，控制总词数在90词左右，搭配准确的时态，保证逻辑连贯即可。
【解析】
1. 格式搭建：按照公开信的规范格式，开头用Dear all称呼全体师生，结尾标注落款校学生会The Students' Union。
2. 内容分层：
第一层：开篇直接点明核心主题，引出需要帮助的八年级学生陈明，简要介绍他患病后长期休学的现状。
第二层：说明陈明的困境：手术是他恢复健康的必要条件，总费用高达30余万元，而他的父母都是出租车司机，无力承担这笔巨额费用，不做手术他的健康会面临极大风险。
第三层：介绍策划的公益活动：计划下周六上午10点到下午3点在学校图书馆举办旧书义卖活动为他筹款，最后发出呼吁，号召全体师生参与，一起帮陈明渡过难关。
3. 语句润色：用合适的衔接词串联内容，保证行文流畅自然，没有语法错误，符合初中英语写作的表达要求，词数符合90词左右的规定。
【答案】
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard-working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can heal him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan. Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are planning to organize a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a. m. to 3 p. m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
【知识点】
公开信写作，现在完成时，公益话题表达
【点评】
本题是贴近校园生活的应用文写作题，既考察学生对英文书信格式的掌握能力，也考察学生整合给定信息、连贯表达的能力，同时渗透了热心助人的公益引导。写作时要注意覆盖所有给定要点，不要遗漏活动时间、地点等关键信息，同时控制篇幅符合词数要求。
【难度系数】
0.6