写作演练
假设你校英语报正在组织主题为"我的DIY故事"的征文比赛,请你用英语写一篇短文投稿,介绍你自己的DIY经历及看法,词数90左右。短文中须包含以下几个方面的内容:
[思路点拨]
① 人称:以第一人称为主;② 时态:以一般过去时和一般现在时为主;③ 写作时首先介绍身份,接着讲述DIY故事,最后表达自己对DIY的看法。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
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假设你校英语报正在组织主题为"我的DIY故事"的征文比赛,请你用英语写一篇短文投稿,介绍你自己的DIY经历及看法,词数90左右。短文中须包含以下几个方面的内容:
[思路点拨]
① 人称:以第一人称为主;② 时态:以一般过去时和一般现在时为主;③ 写作时首先介绍身份,接着讲述DIY故事,最后表达自己对DIY的看法。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
I am a Grade Eight student who is crazy about DIY. I enjoy cooking and drawing because I can find great joy in creating things with my own hands.
DIY has become a wonderful part of my life. It brings me happiness and a sense of achievement. Last week, I successfully put in a light in my room by myself.
At first, I had no idea how to do it, but I didn't give up. I searched online for step-by-step instructions and followed them carefully.
When I finally made it, I was so excited that I couldn't help laughing and cheering for myself.
In my opinion, DIY makes life more colourful and meaningful. It helps me realize how capable I can be.
Through DIY, I've learned that with patience and effort, anything is possible.
(更多精彩作文素材见"强基手册")
答案：写作专训
One possible version:
I am a Grade Eight student who is crazy about DIY. I enjoy cooking and drawing because I can find great joy in creating things with my own hands.
DIY has become a wonderful part of my life. It brings me happiness and a sense of achievement. Last week, I successfully put in a light in my room by myself. At first, I had no idea how to do it, but I didn't give up. I searched online for step-by-step instructions and followed them carefully. When I finally made it, I was so excited that I couldn't help laughing and cheering for myself.
In my opinion, DIY makes life more colourful and meaningful. It helps me realize how capable I can be. Through DIY, I've learned that with patience and effort, anything is possible.
One possible version:
I am a Grade Eight student who is crazy about DIY. I enjoy cooking and drawing because I can find great joy in creating things with my own hands.
DIY has become a wonderful part of my life. It brings me happiness and a sense of achievement. Last week, I successfully put in a light in my room by myself. At first, I had no idea how to do it, but I didn't give up. I searched online for step-by-step instructions and followed them carefully. When I finally made it, I was so excited that I couldn't help laughing and cheering for myself.
In my opinion, DIY makes life more colourful and meaningful. It helps me realize how capable I can be. Through DIY, I've learned that with patience and effort, anything is possible.
解析：
【分析】
首先拿到这道写作题先明确核心要求：主题是“我的DIY故事”，需以第一人称为主，混用一般现在时和一般过去时，覆盖自我介绍、DIY经历、个人看法三个模块。第一步先开篇引入，简单介绍自己的身份，直接点明自己对DIY的喜爱，快速扣题；第二步选取一个真实接地气的DIY事件，用过去时态把事件的起因、遇到的困难、解决过程、最终结果写清楚，让内容有细节不空洞；第三步收尾升华，结合自己的经历谈对DIY的感悟，传递正向观点，同时控制总词数在要求范围内，适当运用积累的DIY相关素材表达，保证行文流畅。
【解析】
1. 开篇段：用定语从句介绍自己的身份，点明自己热爱DIY的特点，说明自己从动手创作中能获得乐趣，快速引出主题。
2. 主体叙事段：先用一般现在时说明DIY已经成为自己生活的一部分，再切换为一般过去时，讲述上周自己独立给房间安装灯具的完整经历：一开始完全不懂操作，没有放弃，上网查找分步教程跟着操作，最终成功完成，写出成功后激动的心情，让事件真实可感。
3. 结尾段：表达自己对DIY的看法，点明DIY让生活更丰富多彩，也让自己意识到耐心和努力就能做成事，升华主题，符合征文的正向导向。
全程注意人称统一以第一人称I为主，时态切换自然，避免语法错误，行文逻辑连贯。
【答案】
One possible version:
I am a Grade Eight student who is crazy about DIY. I enjoy cooking and drawing because I can find great joy in creating things with my own hands.
DIY has become a wonderful part of my life. It brings me happiness and a sense of achievement. Last week, I successfully put in a light in my room by myself. At first, I had no idea how to do it, but I didn't give up. I searched online for step-by-step instructions and followed them carefully. When I finally made it, I was so excited that I couldn't help laughing and cheering for myself.
In my opinion, DIY makes life more colourful and meaningful. It helps me realize how capable I can be. Through DIY, I've learned that with patience and effort, anything is possible.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作
时态灵活运用
DIY主题表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全贴合征文要求，结构清晰完整，开篇快速扣题，中间叙事细节饱满真实，结尾感悟真挚正向，准确切换一般现在时和一般过去时，合理运用定语从句、结果状语从句等高级句式提升表达质量，词数符合要求，是一篇非常适配参赛的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道写作题先明确核心要求：主题是“我的DIY故事”，需以第一人称为主，混用一般现在时和一般过去时，覆盖自我介绍、DIY经历、个人看法三个模块。第一步先开篇引入，简单介绍自己的身份，直接点明自己对DIY的喜爱，快速扣题；第二步选取一个真实接地气的DIY事件，用过去时态把事件的起因、遇到的困难、解决过程、最终结果写清楚，让内容有细节不空洞；第三步收尾升华，结合自己的经历谈对DIY的感悟，传递正向观点，同时控制总词数在要求范围内，适当运用积累的DIY相关素材表达，保证行文流畅。
【解析】
1. 开篇段：用定语从句介绍自己的身份，点明自己热爱DIY的特点，说明自己从动手创作中能获得乐趣，快速引出主题。
2. 主体叙事段：先用一般现在时说明DIY已经成为自己生活的一部分，再切换为一般过去时，讲述上周自己独立给房间安装灯具的完整经历：一开始完全不懂操作，没有放弃，上网查找分步教程跟着操作，最终成功完成，写出成功后激动的心情，让事件真实可感。
3. 结尾段：表达自己对DIY的看法，点明DIY让生活更丰富多彩，也让自己意识到耐心和努力就能做成事，升华主题，符合征文的正向导向。
全程注意人称统一以第一人称I为主，时态切换自然，避免语法错误，行文逻辑连贯。
【答案】
One possible version:
I am a Grade Eight student who is crazy about DIY. I enjoy cooking and drawing because I can find great joy in creating things with my own hands.
DIY has become a wonderful part of my life. It brings me happiness and a sense of achievement. Last week, I successfully put in a light in my room by myself. At first, I had no idea how to do it, but I didn't give up. I searched online for step-by-step instructions and followed them carefully. When I finally made it, I was so excited that I couldn't help laughing and cheering for myself.
In my opinion, DIY makes life more colourful and meaningful. It helps me realize how capable I can be. Through DIY, I've learned that with patience and effort, anything is possible.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作
时态灵活运用
DIY主题表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全贴合征文要求，结构清晰完整，开篇快速扣题，中间叙事细节饱满真实，结尾感悟真挚正向，准确切换一般现在时和一般过去时，合理运用定语从句、结果状语从句等高级句式提升表达质量，词数符合要求，是一篇非常适配参赛的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.6