写作演练＞＞
请你根据提示，以“At the fashion show”为题，写一篇英语短文。
提示：
1. Amy正和她的同班同学们在操场上举行时装表演。
2. Amy穿着红色的丝绸衬衫、黑色的棉质短裙和红色的靴子，她看上去非常时髦。
3. Simon穿的是运动装和运动鞋，运动装是棉质的，穿起来很舒服；运动鞋是黄白相间的，看上去很酷。
4. 多么棒的时装表演啊！大家都玩得很开心。
注意:1. 词数70左右。2. 短文须包括以上所有提示要点,语句通顺,意思连贯,可适当发挥。
[思路点拨]
①时态:一般现在时和现在进行时。②人称:第三人称。③开门见山说明Amy正和同学们在操场上举行时装表演,再分别介绍Amy和Simon在时装表演上的穿着,结尾再谈谈自己对本次时装表演的感受。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
At the fashion show
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(更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”)
请你根据提示，以“At the fashion show”为题，写一篇英语短文。
提示：
1. Amy正和她的同班同学们在操场上举行时装表演。
2. Amy穿着红色的丝绸衬衫、黑色的棉质短裙和红色的靴子，她看上去非常时髦。
3. Simon穿的是运动装和运动鞋，运动装是棉质的，穿起来很舒服；运动鞋是黄白相间的，看上去很酷。
4. 多么棒的时装表演啊！大家都玩得很开心。
注意:1. 词数70左右。2. 短文须包括以上所有提示要点,语句通顺,意思连贯,可适当发挥。
[思路点拨]
①时态:一般现在时和现在进行时。②人称:第三人称。③开门见山说明Amy正和同学们在操场上举行时装表演,再分别介绍Amy和Simon在时装表演上的穿着,结尾再谈谈自己对本次时装表演的感受。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
At the fashion show
_______
_______
_______
_______
_______
_______
_______
_______
_______
_______
_______
(更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”)
答案：At the fashion show
Now Amy and her classmates are having a lively fashion show on the playground. Lots of other students are coming to watch and cheer for them.
Amy is wearing a soft red silk blouse, a short black cotton skirt and a pair of bright red boots. She looks so modern and fashionable that all the viewers are clapping for her.
Then it's Simon's turn to walk. He is wearing casual sports clothes and a pair of trainers. The sports clothes are made of cotton, and they are very comfortable to move in. The trainers are yellow and white and they look very cool on him.
What a great fashion show! Everyone is having a good time and enjoying the special happy afternoon.
Now Amy and her classmates are having a lively fashion show on the playground. Lots of other students are coming to watch and cheer for them.
Amy is wearing a soft red silk blouse, a short black cotton skirt and a pair of bright red boots. She looks so modern and fashionable that all the viewers are clapping for her.
Then it's Simon's turn to walk. He is wearing casual sports clothes and a pair of trainers. The sports clothes are made of cotton, and they are very comfortable to move in. The trainers are yellow and white and they look very cool on him.
What a great fashion show! Everyone is having a good time and enjoying the special happy afternoon.
解析：
【分析】
这是一篇英语写作题，要求以“At the fashion show”为题完成短文。解题思路：1. 确定时态：结合提示中“正举行”等表述，以现在进行时为主，辅以一般现在时描述服饰特征；2. 结构规划：按四段式展开，第一段点明时装表演的场景，第二段介绍Amy的穿着与形象，第三段说明Simon的服饰细节与感受，第四段表达对时装表演的感叹及大家的状态；3. 语言要求：覆盖所有提示要点，使用合适的服饰类词汇，语句通顺，词数符合要求。
【解析】
按照写作思路逐段组织内容：第一段开门见山，说明Amy和同学在操场举行时装表演，可补充有同学观看的细节；第二段描述Amy的穿着（红色丝绸衬衫、黑色棉质短裙、红色靴子），用形容词体现她时髦的样子；第三段介绍Simon的棉质运动装（舒适）和黄白相间的运动鞋（很酷）；第四段以感叹句结尾，表达大家玩得开心。注意时态正确，要点齐全，语句连贯，控制词数。
【答案】
At the fashion show
Now Amy and her classmates are having a lively fashion show on the playground. Lots of other students are coming to watch and cheer for them.
Amy is wearing a soft red silk blouse, a short black cotton skirt and a pair of bright red boots. She looks so modern and fashionable that all the viewers are clapping for her.
Then it's Simon's turn to walk. He is wearing casual sports clothes and a pair of trainers. The sports clothes are made of cotton, and they are very comfortable to move in. The trainers are yellow and white and they look very cool on him.
What a great fashion show! Everyone is having a good time and enjoying the special happy afternoon.
【知识点】
英语写作要点整合；现在进行时运用；服饰类英文表达
【点评】
本文完全覆盖所有提示要点，时态运用准确，结构清晰，语句通顺，适当添加细节丰富内容，符合初中英语写作要求，是一篇优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇英语写作题，要求以“At the fashion show”为题完成短文。解题思路：1. 确定时态：结合提示中“正举行”等表述，以现在进行时为主，辅以一般现在时描述服饰特征；2. 结构规划：按四段式展开，第一段点明时装表演的场景，第二段介绍Amy的穿着与形象，第三段说明Simon的服饰细节与感受，第四段表达对时装表演的感叹及大家的状态；3. 语言要求：覆盖所有提示要点，使用合适的服饰类词汇，语句通顺，词数符合要求。
【解析】
按照写作思路逐段组织内容：第一段开门见山，说明Amy和同学在操场举行时装表演，可补充有同学观看的细节；第二段描述Amy的穿着（红色丝绸衬衫、黑色棉质短裙、红色靴子），用形容词体现她时髦的样子；第三段介绍Simon的棉质运动装（舒适）和黄白相间的运动鞋（很酷）；第四段以感叹句结尾，表达大家玩得开心。注意时态正确，要点齐全，语句连贯，控制词数。
【答案】
At the fashion show
Now Amy and her classmates are having a lively fashion show on the playground. Lots of other students are coming to watch and cheer for them.
Amy is wearing a soft red silk blouse, a short black cotton skirt and a pair of bright red boots. She looks so modern and fashionable that all the viewers are clapping for her.
Then it's Simon's turn to walk. He is wearing casual sports clothes and a pair of trainers. The sports clothes are made of cotton, and they are very comfortable to move in. The trainers are yellow and white and they look very cool on him.
What a great fashion show! Everyone is having a good time and enjoying the special happy afternoon.
【知识点】
英语写作要点整合；现在进行时运用；服饰类英文表达
【点评】
本文完全覆盖所有提示要点，时态运用准确，结构清晰，语句通顺，适当添加细节丰富内容，符合初中英语写作要求，是一篇优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.6