[经典例题]
请以“A boy’s life changed by a charity organization”为题，根据所给信息完成一篇书面表达，词数100左右。
[高分范文]
A boy’s life changed by a charity organization
Tim is a poor boy from Nepal. He used to work on the farm in the mountains every day to help his family. He and his family lived in a small wooden house and couldn’t afford food. So Tim never went to school and couldn’t count or read.
One afternoon, international charity volunteers visited his village. They found many children like Tim worked instead of studying, so they decided to build a free school with textbooks and meals.
Three months later, Tim wore the charity’s new uniform and entered the classroom. Now he goes to school every day. He can count, read simple stories and write his name, and math is his favourite.
Thankful for the chance, Tim hopes to be a teacher. He wants to return to his village some day to teach more children and change their lives through education.
[名师点评]
本文围绕“慈善组织改变男孩人生”这一核心，清晰呈现了慈善活动的关键信息，是一篇结构完整、表达流畅的佳作。
①开篇自然引入主人公的困境，逐步推进慈善组织的介人与男孩人生的转变，逻辑连贯；
②文中灵活运用used to do结构还原Tim过去的生活，精准体现时态差异；
③one afternoon、so、three months later、now、some day等词汇清晰划分“过去困境——慈善介人——如今改变——未来愿景”的层次，使行文逻辑严密；
④文中使用了found引导的宾语从句，体现了对复合句的灵活运用，是加分亮点。
请以“A boy’s life changed by a charity organization”为题，根据所给信息完成一篇书面表达，词数100左右。
[高分范文]
A boy’s life changed by a charity organization
Tim is a poor boy from Nepal. He used to work on the farm in the mountains every day to help his family. He and his family lived in a small wooden house and couldn’t afford food. So Tim never went to school and couldn’t count or read.
One afternoon, international charity volunteers visited his village. They found many children like Tim worked instead of studying, so they decided to build a free school with textbooks and meals.
Three months later, Tim wore the charity’s new uniform and entered the classroom. Now he goes to school every day. He can count, read simple stories and write his name, and math is his favourite.
Thankful for the chance, Tim hopes to be a teacher. He wants to return to his village some day to teach more children and change their lives through education.
[名师点评]
本文围绕“慈善组织改变男孩人生”这一核心，清晰呈现了慈善活动的关键信息，是一篇结构完整、表达流畅的佳作。
①开篇自然引入主人公的困境，逐步推进慈善组织的介人与男孩人生的转变，逻辑连贯；
②文中灵活运用used to do结构还原Tim过去的生活，精准体现时态差异；
③one afternoon、so、three months later、now、some day等词汇清晰划分“过去困境——慈善介人——如今改变——未来愿景”的层次，使行文逻辑严密；
④文中使用了found引导的宾语从句，体现了对复合句的灵活运用，是加分亮点。
答案：A boy’s life changed by a charity organization
Tim is a poor boy from Nepal. He used to work on the farm in the mountains every day to help his family. He and his family lived in a small wooden house and couldn’t afford food. So Tim never went to school and couldn’t count or read.
One afternoon, international charity volunteers visited his village. They found many children like Tim worked instead of studying, so they decided to build a free school with textbooks and meals.
Three months later, Tim wore the charity’s new uniform and entered the classroom. Now he goes to school every day. He can count, read simple stories and write his name, and math is his favourite.
Thankful for the chance, Tim hopes to be a teacher. He wants to return to his village some day to teach more children and change their lives through education.
Tim is a poor boy from Nepal. He used to work on the farm in the mountains every day to help his family. He and his family lived in a small wooden house and couldn’t afford food. So Tim never went to school and couldn’t count or read.
One afternoon, international charity volunteers visited his village. They found many children like Tim worked instead of studying, so they decided to build a free school with textbooks and meals.
Three months later, Tim wore the charity’s new uniform and entered the classroom. Now he goes to school every day. He can count, read simple stories and write his name, and math is his favourite.
Thankful for the chance, Tim hopes to be a teacher. He wants to return to his village some day to teach more children and change their lives through education.
解析：
本题属于译林版八年级下册慈善主题的提纲类书面表达，考察学生对used to do结构、不同时态切换的掌握能力，解题思路如下：
① 审题：明确写作主题是“被慈善组织改变人生的男孩”，使用第三人称叙事，覆盖表格中Tim的背景、过去经历、当下变化、未来规划全部要点，词数100左右。
② 谋篇：按照“过去困境→慈善介入→当下改变→未来愿景”的逻辑分层，用one afternoon、three months later、now等时间标识词划分层次，逻辑清晰。
③ 表达：灵活运用本单元核心结构used to do描述过去的生活状态，正确切换一般过去时、一般现在时、将来计划相关表达，适当补充合理细节让行文流畅自然。
① 审题：明确写作主题是“被慈善组织改变人生的男孩”，使用第三人称叙事，覆盖表格中Tim的背景、过去经历、当下变化、未来规划全部要点，词数100左右。
② 谋篇：按照“过去困境→慈善介入→当下改变→未来愿景”的逻辑分层，用one afternoon、three months later、now等时间标识词划分层次，逻辑清晰。
③ 表达：灵活运用本单元核心结构used to do描述过去的生活状态，正确切换一般过去时、一般现在时、将来计划相关表达，适当补充合理细节让行文流畅自然。