[经典例题]
学校英语俱乐部正组织题为“Great changes in my hometown”的征文比赛。请根据提示，写一篇短文参赛。
1. What was your hometown like in the past?（environment，life，transport...）
2. What is your hometown like now?（environment，life，transport...）
3. What do you think of the changes?
注意：1. 90词左右（画直线部分不计入总词数）；2. 文中不能出现真实姓名、班级等信息；3. 文章必须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺。
[高分范文]
Great changes in my hometown
With the development of technology，great changes have taken place in my hometown over the years. Now let me tell you something about the changes.
In the past，the life in my hometown was simple but poor. People usually walked or rode a bike to go shopping. There were not many trees on the hills and there was rubbish in the streets.
But now，the life in my hometown is totally different. Almost every family has a car and it is very convenient to go shopping by car. There are many different kinds of goods in the shopping mall and people have more activities to do than before. And the environment is better than before.
In my opinion，our lives will become better and better with our joint effort.
[名师点评]
短文描述了作者家乡的环境、交通的变化，表达了作者对家乡变得越来越好的期待。
① 开篇点题，说明家乡发生了巨大变化；
② in the past、but now的使用使短文过渡自然，上下文连贯；
③ “It is + adj. + to do sth.”和there be句型的使用体现了作者扎实的语言功底；
④ in one's opinion和比较级的使用表达了作者对家乡越来越好的期待。
学校英语俱乐部正组织题为“Great changes in my hometown”的征文比赛。请根据提示，写一篇短文参赛。
1. What was your hometown like in the past?（environment，life，transport...）
2. What is your hometown like now?（environment，life，transport...）
3. What do you think of the changes?
注意：1. 90词左右（画直线部分不计入总词数）；2. 文中不能出现真实姓名、班级等信息；3. 文章必须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺。
[高分范文]
Great changes in my hometown
With the development of technology，great changes have taken place in my hometown over the years. Now let me tell you something about the changes.
In the past，the life in my hometown was simple but poor. People usually walked or rode a bike to go shopping. There were not many trees on the hills and there was rubbish in the streets.
But now，the life in my hometown is totally different. Almost every family has a car and it is very convenient to go shopping by car. There are many different kinds of goods in the shopping mall and people have more activities to do than before. And the environment is better than before.
In my opinion，our lives will become better and better with our joint effort.
[名师点评]
短文描述了作者家乡的环境、交通的变化，表达了作者对家乡变得越来越好的期待。
① 开篇点题，说明家乡发生了巨大变化；
② in the past、but now的使用使短文过渡自然，上下文连贯；
③ “It is + adj. + to do sth.”和there be句型的使用体现了作者扎实的语言功底；
④ in one's opinion和比较级的使用表达了作者对家乡越来越好的期待。
答案：Great changes in my hometown
With the development of technology, great changes have taken place in my hometown over the years. Now let me tell you something about the changes.
In the past，the life in my hometown was simple but poor. People usually walked or rode a bike to go shopping. There were not many trees on the hills and there was rubbish in the streets.
But now，the life in my hometown is totally different. Almost every family has a car and it is very convenient to go shopping by car. There are many different kinds of goods in the shopping mall and people have more activities to do than before. And the environment is better than before.
In my opinion，our lives will become better and better with our joint effort.
With the development of technology, great changes have taken place in my hometown over the years. Now let me tell you something about the changes.
In the past，the life in my hometown was simple but poor. People usually walked or rode a bike to go shopping. There were not many trees on the hills and there was rubbish in the streets.
But now，the life in my hometown is totally different. Almost every family has a car and it is very convenient to go shopping by car. There are many different kinds of goods in the shopping mall and people have more activities to do than before. And the environment is better than before.
In my opinion，our lives will become better and better with our joint effort.
解析：
本题是译林版八年级下册单元要求掌握的话题类英语写作题，主题为“我家乡的巨变”，写作需要覆盖全部给定要点：① 描述过去家乡的环境、生活、交通状况；② 描述当下家乡在环境、生活、交通方面的新面貌；③ 表达你对这些变化的看法。写作时注意时态搭配：描述过去的情况用一般过去时，描述现在的情况用一般现在时，可结合本单元所学的现在完成时、形容词比较级、It is + adj. + to do sth. 等结构丰富表达，用合适的过渡词衔接行文，控制词数在90词左右，不得出现真实个人信息即可。
[小试身手]
请你根据以下提示，以“Great changes around me”为题，用英语写一篇短文。词数100左右。
提示：1. 过去：道路狭窄、拥挤，房屋老旧，河水……；2. 现在：路面宽阔、洁净，高楼林立，满城绿树鲜花……；3. 你的感受。
[思路点拨]
本文是关于家乡变化的描述，短文可以从家乡过去的道路、房屋、河水等方面进行描述，然后再描述家乡的现状。过去的描述用一般过去时，现状的描述用一般现在时。注意人称可以用第一人称和第三人称。
[写作提纲]
mermaid
graph TD
A[Great changes around me] --＞ B[道路]
A --＞ C[房屋]
A --＞ D[河水]
A --＞ E[感受]
B --＞ B1[过去：narrow and crowded]
B --＞ B2[现在：wide and clean]
C --＞ C1[过去：old and small]
C --＞ C2[现在：beautiful and big]
D --＞ D1[过去：was polluted badly]
D --＞ D2[现在：become clean]
E --＞ E1[感受：better and better]
[妙笔生花]
Great changes around me
（更多精彩作文素材见“背记手册”）
请你根据以下提示，以“Great changes around me”为题，用英语写一篇短文。词数100左右。
提示：1. 过去：道路狭窄、拥挤，房屋老旧，河水……；2. 现在：路面宽阔、洁净，高楼林立，满城绿树鲜花……；3. 你的感受。
[思路点拨]
本文是关于家乡变化的描述，短文可以从家乡过去的道路、房屋、河水等方面进行描述，然后再描述家乡的现状。过去的描述用一般过去时，现状的描述用一般现在时。注意人称可以用第一人称和第三人称。
[写作提纲]
mermaid
graph TD
A[Great changes around me] --＞ B[道路]
A --＞ C[房屋]
A --＞ D[河水]
A --＞ E[感受]
B --＞ B1[过去：narrow and crowded]
B --＞ B2[现在：wide and clean]
C --＞ C1[过去：old and small]
C --＞ C2[现在：beautiful and big]
D --＞ D1[过去：was polluted badly]
D --＞ D2[现在：become clean]
E --＞ E1[感受：better and better]
[妙笔生花]
Great changes around me
（更多精彩作文素材见“背记手册”）
答案：One possible version:
Great changes around me
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around me. The roads used to be narrow and crowded. The houses were old and small. The rivers were polluted badly and there was rubbish in them. Nowadays the roads are wide and clean. Lots of tall buildings have been built. Most of us have moved into beautiful big houses. The rivers become clean. My hometown looks like a big garden with green trees, grass and colourful flowers.
Our country is rich and strong, and we are living a happy life. I'm sure as time goes by, our daily life will be better and better!
Great changes around me
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around me. The roads used to be narrow and crowded. The houses were old and small. The rivers were polluted badly and there was rubbish in them. Nowadays the roads are wide and clean. Lots of tall buildings have been built. Most of us have moved into beautiful big houses. The rivers become clean. My hometown looks like a big garden with green trees, grass and colourful flowers.
Our country is rich and strong, and we are living a happy life. I'm sure as time goes by, our daily life will be better and better!
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先明确写作核心是围绕“我身边的巨大变化”展开今昔对比。首先确定时态规则：描述过去的旧面貌统一用一般过去时，描述当下的新面貌可以用一般现在时或者现在完成时，结尾展望未来用一般将来时即可。接下来按照思维导图的逻辑搭建内容框架：首先开篇总起，直接点明近些年身边发生了很多巨变；之后分三个模块依次做今昔对比：先讲道路过去狭窄拥挤、现在宽阔洁净，再讲房屋过去老旧狭小、现在又大又美观，接着讲河水过去污染严重、现在变得清澈干净，还可以补充提示里的满城绿树鲜花的细节让内容更充实；最后收尾抒发感受，表达对未来生活越来越好的期待，全程控制词数在100左右，保证要点全覆盖、逻辑通顺即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：用"In the past few years, great changes have taken place around me"直接引出主题，开门见山。
2. 过去情况描述：依次对应提示信息，用"The roads used to be narrow and crowded. The houses were old and small. The rivers were polluted badly and there was rubbish in them."准确还原过去道路、房屋、河水的状态，时态使用一般过去时符合语境。
3. 当下变化描述：对应写出现在的新面貌"Nowadays the roads are wide and clean. Lots of tall buildings have been built. Most of us have moved into beautiful big houses. The rivers become clean. My hometown looks like a big garden with green trees, grass and colourful flowers."，覆盖所有提示要点，补充的绿植鲜花细节让内容更生动。
4. 结尾抒情收尾：用"Our country is rich and strong, and we are living a happy life. I'm sure as time goes by, our daily life will be better and better!"自然抒发感受，呼应主题。
【答案】
Great changes around me
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around me. The roads used to be narrow and crowded. The houses were old and small. The rivers were polluted badly and there was rubbish in them. Nowadays the roads are wide and clean. Lots of tall buildings have been built. Most of us have moved into beautiful big houses. The rivers become clean. My hometown looks like a big garden with green trees, grass and colourful flowers.
Our country is rich and strong, and we are living a happy life. I'm sure as time goes by, our daily life will be better and better!
【知识点】
一般过去时用法，现在完成时用法，变化类话题写作
【点评】
本篇作文完全覆盖题干给出的所有写作要点，今昔对比的逻辑清晰流畅，时态切换准确自然，补充的家乡如花园的细节让内容更饱满，结尾的情感抒发真挚自然，符合初中英语写作的评分要求，是一篇非常规范的话题范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题，首先明确写作核心是围绕“我身边的巨大变化”展开今昔对比。首先确定时态规则：描述过去的旧面貌统一用一般过去时，描述当下的新面貌可以用一般现在时或者现在完成时，结尾展望未来用一般将来时即可。接下来按照思维导图的逻辑搭建内容框架：首先开篇总起，直接点明近些年身边发生了很多巨变；之后分三个模块依次做今昔对比：先讲道路过去狭窄拥挤、现在宽阔洁净，再讲房屋过去老旧狭小、现在又大又美观，接着讲河水过去污染严重、现在变得清澈干净，还可以补充提示里的满城绿树鲜花的细节让内容更充实；最后收尾抒发感受，表达对未来生活越来越好的期待，全程控制词数在100左右，保证要点全覆盖、逻辑通顺即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：用"In the past few years, great changes have taken place around me"直接引出主题，开门见山。
2. 过去情况描述：依次对应提示信息，用"The roads used to be narrow and crowded. The houses were old and small. The rivers were polluted badly and there was rubbish in them."准确还原过去道路、房屋、河水的状态，时态使用一般过去时符合语境。
3. 当下变化描述：对应写出现在的新面貌"Nowadays the roads are wide and clean. Lots of tall buildings have been built. Most of us have moved into beautiful big houses. The rivers become clean. My hometown looks like a big garden with green trees, grass and colourful flowers."，覆盖所有提示要点，补充的绿植鲜花细节让内容更生动。
4. 结尾抒情收尾：用"Our country is rich and strong, and we are living a happy life. I'm sure as time goes by, our daily life will be better and better!"自然抒发感受，呼应主题。
【答案】
Great changes around me
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around me. The roads used to be narrow and crowded. The houses were old and small. The rivers were polluted badly and there was rubbish in them. Nowadays the roads are wide and clean. Lots of tall buildings have been built. Most of us have moved into beautiful big houses. The rivers become clean. My hometown looks like a big garden with green trees, grass and colourful flowers.
Our country is rich and strong, and we are living a happy life. I'm sure as time goes by, our daily life will be better and better!
【知识点】
一般过去时用法，现在完成时用法，变化类话题写作
【点评】
本篇作文完全覆盖题干给出的所有写作要点，今昔对比的逻辑清晰流畅，时态切换准确自然，补充的家乡如花园的细节让内容更饱满，结尾的情感抒发真挚自然，符合初中英语写作的评分要求，是一篇非常规范的话题范文。
【难度系数】
0.7