典型例题
假如你是李华，今年五一劳动节，你和父母坐火车一起去北京游玩。请你根据下面表格中的提示内容，用英语写一篇日记，可适当发挥。
要求：1. 意思连贯，表达准确，可适当拓展；2. 不少于70词。
May 1st
思路点拨
本文要求学生写一篇游记，体裁应是记叙文，时态为一般过去时。提示：写作要点已给出，学生应注意不要遗漏“要点提示”，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。第一步，介绍五一劳动节，我和父母一起去北京游玩；第二步，具体描述一天的行程；第三步，总结在北京游玩后的感受。
范文欣赏
May 1st
This May Day, I went to Beijing with my parents by train.
It was sunny. We were excited. We visited
Tian'anmen Square and the Palace Museum in the morning. There were lots of people. At noon, we had beef noodles at a restaurant. In the afternoon, we visited the Great Wall and took some photos there. Beijing is a beautiful city.
When I came back, I felt a little tired but very happy. All in all, it was an exciting day.
假如你是李华，今年五一劳动节，你和父母坐火车一起去北京游玩。请你根据下面表格中的提示内容，用英语写一篇日记，可适当发挥。
要求：1. 意思连贯，表达准确，可适当拓展；2. 不少于70词。
May 1st
思路点拨
本文要求学生写一篇游记，体裁应是记叙文，时态为一般过去时。提示：写作要点已给出，学生应注意不要遗漏“要点提示”，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。第一步，介绍五一劳动节，我和父母一起去北京游玩；第二步，具体描述一天的行程；第三步，总结在北京游玩后的感受。
范文欣赏
May 1st
This May Day, I went to Beijing with my parents by train.
It was sunny. We were excited. We visited
Tian'anmen Square and the Palace Museum in the morning. There were lots of people. At noon, we had beef noodles at a restaurant. In the afternoon, we visited the Great Wall and took some photos there. Beijing is a beautiful city.
When I came back, I felt a little tired but very happy. All in all, it was an exciting day.
答案：May 1st
This May Day, I went to Beijing with my parents by train.
It was sunny. We were excited. We visited Tian'anmen Square and the Palace Museum in the morning. There were lots of people. At noon, we had beef noodles at a restaurant. In the afternoon, we visited the Great Wall and took some photos there. Beijing is a beautiful city.
When I came back, I felt a little tired but very happy. All in all, it was an exciting day.
This May Day, I went to Beijing with my parents by train.
It was sunny. We were excited. We visited Tian'anmen Square and the Palace Museum in the morning. There were lots of people. At noon, we had beef noodles at a restaurant. In the afternoon, we visited the Great Wall and took some photos there. Beijing is a beautiful city.
When I came back, I felt a little tired but very happy. All in all, it was an exciting day.
解析：
本文要求写一篇游记类记叙文，需使用一般过去时进行创作。写作可分为三步：1.开篇点明五一劳动节和父母乘火车前往北京游玩；2.按照时间顺序，结合表格提示的天气、各时段行程，适当增添细节，如看到很多游客、拍照等，来描述当天活动；3.结尾总结游玩后的感受，凸显愉悦的心情。
(2025·南京秦淮区期末)神州大地，山河锦绣。七彩云南，处处盛景。倘若你是Andy，请按照你的手账内容，和小华分享你在云南期间的旅行经历和感受吧！
要求：1. 请对上述至少2个景点及其活动项目展开描述，可适当拓展。全文连贯通顺。2. 文中不得提及个人身份的任何信息，如校名、人名等。3. 词数80左右。
Dear Xiaohua,
I followed your advice and had a trip to Yunnan last month.
Yours,
Andy
要求：1. 请对上述至少2个景点及其活动项目展开描述，可适当拓展。全文连贯通顺。2. 文中不得提及个人身份的任何信息，如校名、人名等。3. 词数80左右。
Dear Xiaohua,
I followed your advice and had a trip to Yunnan last month.
It was truly amazing!
First, I visited the ancient city. The old buildings with gray walls and red lanterns made me feel like I travelled back in time. I walked along the cobblestone streets and tried local snacks—they were delicious!
Next, I climbed Yulong Snow Mountain. The air was fresh, and the snow-capped peaks looked like a fairy tale. I took many photos and even made a snowball!
The trip left me with unforgettable memories. I hope you can visit Yunnan too!
Yours,
Andy
答案：写作能力突破
One possible version:
Dear Xiaohua,
I followed your advice and had a trip to Yunnan last month. It was truly amazing!
First, I visited the ancient city. The old buildings with gray walls and red lanterns made me feel like I travelled back in time. I walked along the cobblestone streets and tried local snacks—they were delicious!
Next, I climbed Yulong Snow Mountain. The air was fresh, and the snow-capped peaks looked like a fairy tale. I took many photos and even made a snowball!
The trip left me with unforgettable memories. I hope you can visit Yunnan too!
Yours,
Andy
leave sb with sth=leave sb sth给某人留下某物
思路引导
[总体分析]
①体裁:本文是一篇应用文,为书信;②时态:时态主要为一般过去时,因为是描述过去在云南的旅行经历;③提示:写作要点已给出,考生应注意不要遗漏"至少对2个景点及其活动项目展开描述"的要求,可适当拓展,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图。借用"遵循小华的建议,上个月去了云南旅行"来引出重点介绍的内容;第二步,具体阐述写作内容,从"古城建筑、玉龙雪山、洱海、热带雨林"等几个景点中至少选择两个,描述其特点及活动项目;第三步,书写结语。
[亮点短语]
①ancient city古城 ②cobblestone streets鹅卵石街道
③local snacks当地小吃 ④snow-capped peaks积雪覆盖的山峰
⑤unforgettable memories难忘的回忆
[高分句型]
The old buildings with gray walls and red lanterns made me feel like I travelled back in time.(with复合结构作后置定语)
One possible version:
Dear Xiaohua,
I followed your advice and had a trip to Yunnan last month. It was truly amazing!
First, I visited the ancient city. The old buildings with gray walls and red lanterns made me feel like I travelled back in time. I walked along the cobblestone streets and tried local snacks—they were delicious!
Next, I climbed Yulong Snow Mountain. The air was fresh, and the snow-capped peaks looked like a fairy tale. I took many photos and even made a snowball!
The trip left me with unforgettable memories. I hope you can visit Yunnan too!
Yours,
Andy
leave sb with sth=leave sb sth给某人留下某物
思路引导
[总体分析]
①体裁:本文是一篇应用文,为书信;②时态:时态主要为一般过去时,因为是描述过去在云南的旅行经历;③提示:写作要点已给出,考生应注意不要遗漏"至少对2个景点及其活动项目展开描述"的要求,可适当拓展,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图。借用"遵循小华的建议,上个月去了云南旅行"来引出重点介绍的内容;第二步,具体阐述写作内容,从"古城建筑、玉龙雪山、洱海、热带雨林"等几个景点中至少选择两个,描述其特点及活动项目;第三步,书写结语。
[亮点短语]
①ancient city古城 ②cobblestone streets鹅卵石街道
③local snacks当地小吃 ④snow-capped peaks积雪覆盖的山峰
⑤unforgettable memories难忘的回忆
[高分句型]
The old buildings with gray walls and red lanterns made me feel like I travelled back in time.(with复合结构作后置定语)
解析：
【分析】
首先，明确这是一篇书信类应用文写作，写作时态以一般过去时为主，因为是描述过去的旅行经历。解题时，先借助题目给出的开头引出旅行话题；接着从图中景点里选择至少2个，结合景点特色描述自己的活动，比如古城可以写逛街道、尝小吃，玉龙雪山可以写登山、拍照等；最后总结旅行感受，发出邀请，使内容完整连贯。要注意不能提及个人身份信息，词数控制在80左右。
【解析】
1. 开头引入：利用题目给出的开头句，直接点明遵循建议去云南旅行，并用"It was truly amazing!"表达整体感受，引出下文。
2. 景点描述：
选择古城：描述古城的建筑特色（gray walls and red lanterns），搭配活动（walk along the cobblestone streets、try local snacks），体现古城的古韵与美食特色。
选择玉龙雪山：描述雪山的景色（snow-capped peaks），搭配活动（took many photos、made a snowball），展现雪山的梦幻与游玩乐趣。
3. 结尾总结：用"The trip left me with unforgettable memories."总结旅行感受，再用"I hope you can visit Yunnan too!"发出邀请，使书信结构完整。
同时，文中运用了with复合结构作后置定语的高分句型，以及丰富的亮点短语，提升文章质量。
【答案】
Dear Xiaohua,
I followed your advice and had a trip to Yunnan last month. It was truly amazing!
First, I visited the ancient city. The old buildings with gray walls and red lanterns made me feel like I travelled back in time. I walked along the cobblestone streets and tried local snacks—they were delicious!
Next, I climbed Yulong Snow Mountain. The air was fresh, and the snow-capped peaks looked like a fairy tale. I took many photos and even made a snowball!
The trip left me with unforgettable memories. I hope you can visit Yunnan too!
Yours,
Andy
【知识点】
书信写作格式、一般过去时运用、景点场景描述
【点评】
本文紧扣写作要求，选取两个典型景点展开描述，内容充实具体，活动与景点特色结合紧密；时态运用准确，书信格式规范；文中使用了丰富的亮点短语和高分句型，语言生动流畅，能很好地传递旅行的愉悦感受，符合词数要求且未提及个人身份信息。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先，明确这是一篇书信类应用文写作，写作时态以一般过去时为主，因为是描述过去的旅行经历。解题时，先借助题目给出的开头引出旅行话题；接着从图中景点里选择至少2个，结合景点特色描述自己的活动，比如古城可以写逛街道、尝小吃，玉龙雪山可以写登山、拍照等；最后总结旅行感受，发出邀请，使内容完整连贯。要注意不能提及个人身份信息，词数控制在80左右。
【解析】
1. 开头引入：利用题目给出的开头句，直接点明遵循建议去云南旅行，并用"It was truly amazing!"表达整体感受，引出下文。
2. 景点描述：
选择古城：描述古城的建筑特色（gray walls and red lanterns），搭配活动（walk along the cobblestone streets、try local snacks），体现古城的古韵与美食特色。
选择玉龙雪山：描述雪山的景色（snow-capped peaks），搭配活动（took many photos、made a snowball），展现雪山的梦幻与游玩乐趣。
3. 结尾总结：用"The trip left me with unforgettable memories."总结旅行感受，再用"I hope you can visit Yunnan too!"发出邀请，使书信结构完整。
同时，文中运用了with复合结构作后置定语的高分句型，以及丰富的亮点短语，提升文章质量。
【答案】
Dear Xiaohua,
I followed your advice and had a trip to Yunnan last month. It was truly amazing!
First, I visited the ancient city. The old buildings with gray walls and red lanterns made me feel like I travelled back in time. I walked along the cobblestone streets and tried local snacks—they were delicious!
Next, I climbed Yulong Snow Mountain. The air was fresh, and the snow-capped peaks looked like a fairy tale. I took many photos and even made a snowball!
The trip left me with unforgettable memories. I hope you can visit Yunnan too!
Yours,
Andy
【知识点】
书信写作格式、一般过去时运用、景点场景描述
【点评】
本文紧扣写作要求，选取两个典型景点展开描述，内容充实具体，活动与景点特色结合紧密；时态运用准确，书信格式规范；文中使用了丰富的亮点短语和高分句型，语言生动流畅，能很好地传递旅行的愉悦感受，符合词数要求且未提及个人身份信息。
【难度系数】
0.6