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(2025·江苏徐州期末)在七年级的学习和生活中，你肯定参加过一些户外活动，像“a school trip”或“going camping”等。你班将开展以“An amazing outdoor activity”为题的征文活动，并在班级内展示。请根据以下图示内容用英语写一篇短文。
【注意】1. 词数不少于80，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
2. 内容必须包括但不限于图示中的要点，可以适当发挥，使短文完整、流畅。
3. 文中不得提及真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
An amazing outdoor activity
Time goes by quickly. In the past year, I have taken part in many amazing outdoor activities.
(2025·江苏徐州期末)在七年级的学习和生活中，你肯定参加过一些户外活动，像“a school trip”或“going camping”等。你班将开展以“An amazing outdoor activity”为题的征文活动，并在班级内展示。请根据以下图示内容用英语写一篇短文。
【注意】1. 词数不少于80，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
2. 内容必须包括但不限于图示中的要点，可以适当发挥，使短文完整、流畅。
3. 文中不得提及真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
An amazing outdoor activity
Time goes by quickly. In the past year, I have taken part in many amazing outdoor activities.
Last summer, my classmates and I joined in an unforgettable school trip to the nearby hills.
We spent the day climbing the hill, taking in fresh air and seeing different animals. We even had a small picnic by a river, where we shared stories and laughter. When we reached the top of the hill, we were so excited to see the views of the entire valley.
This activity was amazing because it gave us a chance to take a break from noisy daily life and connect with nature. It was also a great opportunity to communicate with our classmates and create good memories.
I felt so happy and couldn't wait to attend the next outdoor activity!
答案：An amazing outdoor activity
Time goes by quickly. In the past year, I have taken part in many amazing outdoor activities. Last summer, my classmates and I joined in an unforgettable school trip to the nearby hills.
We spent the day climbing the hill, taking in fresh air and seeing different animals. We even had a small picnic by a river, where we shared stories and laughter. When we reached the top of the hill, we were so excited to see the views of the entire valley.
This activity was amazing because it gave us a chance to take a break from noisy daily life and connect with nature. It was also a great opportunity to communicate with our classmates and create good memories.
I felt so happy and couldn't wait to attend the next outdoor activity!
Time goes by quickly. In the past year, I have taken part in many amazing outdoor activities. Last summer, my classmates and I joined in an unforgettable school trip to the nearby hills.
We spent the day climbing the hill, taking in fresh air and seeing different animals. We even had a small picnic by a river, where we shared stories and laughter. When we reached the top of the hill, we were so excited to see the views of the entire valley.
This activity was amazing because it gave us a chance to take a break from noisy daily life and connect with nature. It was also a great opportunity to communicate with our classmates and create good memories.
I felt so happy and couldn't wait to attend the next outdoor activity!
解析：
【分析】
这是一篇七年级英语提纲类叙事作文，解题时首先要先明确题目给出的四个核心写作要求：交代活动的时间地点、描述活动中做的事、说明活动令人惊叹的原因、写出自己的活动感受。第一步先承接题目给出的开头，选择学生熟悉的校园郊游场景，清晰点明活动的时间和地点；第二步补充活动过程的细节，比如爬山、野餐、登顶观景等内容，让叙事更饱满；第三步从亲近自然、放松身心、增进同学情谊的角度解释活动很棒的原因，逻辑通顺；最后收尾写出个人感受，同时注意满足词数要求，不出现真实人名校名，描述过去活动统一使用对应的时态，保证行文流畅。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：文体为记叙文，主题是介绍一次难忘的户外活动，需要完整覆盖思维导图给出的4个核心要点，词数不少于80，不得出现真实个人信息，叙事主体时态以一般过去时为主。
2. 谋篇布局：
① 开篇承接给定开头，直接点明本次户外活动的具体时间和地点，交代事件背景；
② 中间段落详细展开活动过程，列举参与的具体活动，补充细节让内容生动真实；
③ 专门段落解释活动为什么令人惊叹，从逃离日常压力、亲近自然、增进同伴情谊两个角度说明理由；
④ 结尾收尾，写出自己的直观感受，表达对后续户外活动的期待，完成全文。
3. 表达优化：适当使用非谓语结构、定语从句丰富句式，避免全部使用简单句，保证行文连贯自然。
【答案】
An amazing outdoor activity
Time goes by quickly. In the past year, I have taken part in many amazing outdoor activities. Last summer, my classmates and I joined in an unforgettable school trip to the nearby hills.
We spent the day climbing the hill, taking in fresh air and seeing different animals. We even had a small picnic by a river, where we shared stories and laughter. When we reached the top of the hill, we were so excited to see the views of the entire valley.
This activity was amazing because it gave us a chance to take a break from noisy daily life and connect with nature. It was also a great opportunity to communicate with our classmates and create good memories.
I felt so happy and couldn't wait to attend the next outdoor activity!
【知识点】
记叙文写作；一般过去时应用；提纲作文要点覆盖
【点评】
本题贴合七年级学生的校园生活实际，思维导图清晰给出了所有核心写作方向，有效降低了写作的门槛，既考查学生对叙事类作文结构的掌握能力，也引导学生结合自身生活体验补充细节，避免内容空洞，同时锻炼学生用英语描述事件、表达个人感受的输出能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
这是一篇七年级英语提纲类叙事作文，解题时首先要先明确题目给出的四个核心写作要求：交代活动的时间地点、描述活动中做的事、说明活动令人惊叹的原因、写出自己的活动感受。第一步先承接题目给出的开头，选择学生熟悉的校园郊游场景，清晰点明活动的时间和地点；第二步补充活动过程的细节，比如爬山、野餐、登顶观景等内容，让叙事更饱满；第三步从亲近自然、放松身心、增进同学情谊的角度解释活动很棒的原因，逻辑通顺；最后收尾写出个人感受，同时注意满足词数要求，不出现真实人名校名，描述过去活动统一使用对应的时态，保证行文流畅。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：文体为记叙文，主题是介绍一次难忘的户外活动，需要完整覆盖思维导图给出的4个核心要点，词数不少于80，不得出现真实个人信息，叙事主体时态以一般过去时为主。
2. 谋篇布局：
① 开篇承接给定开头，直接点明本次户外活动的具体时间和地点，交代事件背景；
② 中间段落详细展开活动过程，列举参与的具体活动，补充细节让内容生动真实；
③ 专门段落解释活动为什么令人惊叹，从逃离日常压力、亲近自然、增进同伴情谊两个角度说明理由；
④ 结尾收尾，写出自己的直观感受，表达对后续户外活动的期待，完成全文。
3. 表达优化：适当使用非谓语结构、定语从句丰富句式，避免全部使用简单句，保证行文连贯自然。
【答案】
An amazing outdoor activity
Time goes by quickly. In the past year, I have taken part in many amazing outdoor activities. Last summer, my classmates and I joined in an unforgettable school trip to the nearby hills.
We spent the day climbing the hill, taking in fresh air and seeing different animals. We even had a small picnic by a river, where we shared stories and laughter. When we reached the top of the hill, we were so excited to see the views of the entire valley.
This activity was amazing because it gave us a chance to take a break from noisy daily life and connect with nature. It was also a great opportunity to communicate with our classmates and create good memories.
I felt so happy and couldn't wait to attend the next outdoor activity!
【知识点】
记叙文写作；一般过去时应用；提纲作文要点覆盖
【点评】
本题贴合七年级学生的校园生活实际，思维导图清晰给出了所有核心写作方向，有效降低了写作的门槛，既考查学生对叙事类作文结构的掌握能力，也引导学生结合自身生活体验补充细节，避免内容空洞，同时锻炼学生用英语描述事件、表达个人感受的输出能力。
【难度系数】
0.7