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（2025·江苏泰州靖江八校联盟调研）China Daily 报社正在举行题为“My dream home”的征文活动，请根据下面的思维导图描述你的梦想家园。
【要求】1. 表达清楚，书写工整，语法正确，上下文连贯。
2. 必须包括所有要点提示，并适当发挥。
3. 词数不少于80。
4. 不得使用真实姓名和校名等。
My dream home
（2025·江苏泰州靖江八校联盟调研）China Daily 报社正在举行题为“My dream home”的征文活动，请根据下面的思维导图描述你的梦想家园。
【要求】1. 表达清楚，书写工整，语法正确，上下文连贯。
2. 必须包括所有要点提示，并适当发挥。
3. 词数不少于80。
4. 不得使用真实姓名和校名等。
My dream home
My dream home is a big house at the foot of a hill. There are many trees and flowers around it. I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. It is far from the city centre so people can take a bus or drive there.
There are two floors in my house. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen and a house cinema. I can have meals and watch films at the same time. On the first floor, there are six rooms. My friends can come and stay with me together at the weekend. I have many neighbours and they are friendly and helpful. They often help me with my problems.
This is my dream home. It is a good place to enjoy life.
答案：My dream home
My dream home is a big house at the foot of a hill. There are many trees and flowers around it. I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. It is far from the city centre so people can take a bus or drive there.
There are two floors in my house. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen and a house cinema. I can have meals and watch films at the same time. On the first floor, there are six rooms. My friends can come and stay with me together at the weekend. I have many neighbours and they are friendly and helpful. They often help me with my problems.
This is my dream home. It is a good place to enjoy life.
My dream home is a big house at the foot of a hill. There are many trees and flowers around it. I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. It is far from the city centre so people can take a bus or drive there.
There are two floors in my house. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen and a house cinema. I can have meals and watch films at the same time. On the first floor, there are six rooms. My friends can come and stay with me together at the weekend. I have many neighbours and they are friendly and helpful. They often help me with my problems.
This is my dream home. It is a good place to enjoy life.
解析：
【分析】
首先拿到这道写作题，第一步先梳理所有要求和思维导图给出的全部要点：需要覆盖6个核心问题，分别是梦想家园的位置、周边环境、屋内陈设、可在家开展的活动、邻居的特点+实例、到市中心的距离、前往的交通方式。接下来规划写作逻辑：开篇先直接点明梦想家园的选址，紧接着描述周边的景物，之后说明它和市中心的距离以及对应的出行方式；接下来分段介绍房屋内部的布局，对应说明可以在屋内做的各类活动，之后补充邻居的性格特点，搭配具体的互助实例；最后收尾总结，表达自己对这个梦想家园的喜爱，点明它是享受生活的好地方。写作过程中注意不要遗漏任意一个要点，适当补充细节让上下文连贯，保证词数达标，不出现真实个人信息即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本题属于提示类情景作文，主题为"My dream home"，文体为介绍类说明文，以第一人称、一般现在时作为主要时态，要求覆盖全部思维导图要点，词数不少于80词。
2. 谋篇布局：
第一段：开篇点题，介绍梦想家园坐落在山脚下，周边有花有树，说明它远离市中心，人们可以乘坐公交或者自驾前往。
第二段：介绍房屋的楼层结构，分别说明一楼和二楼的功能区域，对应写出可以在家就餐、看电影、和朋友周末小住等活动，之后介绍邻居友善热心，经常帮自己解决难题，完成邻居相关要点的描述。
第三段：收尾总结，点明这处家园是享受生活的好地方，收束全文。
3. 语言组织：合理运用there be句型、固定搭配，保证语法准确，语句衔接自然流畅，符合写作要求。
【答案】
My dream home
My dream home is a big house at the foot of a hill. There are many trees and flowers around it. I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. It is far from the city centre so people can take a bus or drive there.
There are two floors in my house. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen and a house cinema. I can have meals and watch films at the same time. On the first floor, there are six rooms. My friends can come and stay with me together at the weekend. I have many neighbours and they are friendly and helpful. They often help me with my problems.
This is my dream home. It is a good place to enjoy life.
【知识点】
情景作文写作，there be句型，要点整合表达
【点评】
本题属于初中英语常见的提示类写作题型，通过思维导图给出清晰的写作维度，既限定了核心写作方向避免学生偏题，也给学生留出了合理的发挥空间，能够有效考察学生的基础语言运用能力和逻辑叙事能力，参考范文结构清晰完整，所有给定要点全部覆盖，语句通顺自然，完全符合题目的各项要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道写作题，第一步先梳理所有要求和思维导图给出的全部要点：需要覆盖6个核心问题，分别是梦想家园的位置、周边环境、屋内陈设、可在家开展的活动、邻居的特点+实例、到市中心的距离、前往的交通方式。接下来规划写作逻辑：开篇先直接点明梦想家园的选址，紧接着描述周边的景物，之后说明它和市中心的距离以及对应的出行方式；接下来分段介绍房屋内部的布局，对应说明可以在屋内做的各类活动，之后补充邻居的性格特点，搭配具体的互助实例；最后收尾总结，表达自己对这个梦想家园的喜爱，点明它是享受生活的好地方。写作过程中注意不要遗漏任意一个要点，适当补充细节让上下文连贯，保证词数达标，不出现真实个人信息即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本题属于提示类情景作文，主题为"My dream home"，文体为介绍类说明文，以第一人称、一般现在时作为主要时态，要求覆盖全部思维导图要点，词数不少于80词。
2. 谋篇布局：
第一段：开篇点题，介绍梦想家园坐落在山脚下，周边有花有树，说明它远离市中心，人们可以乘坐公交或者自驾前往。
第二段：介绍房屋的楼层结构，分别说明一楼和二楼的功能区域，对应写出可以在家就餐、看电影、和朋友周末小住等活动，之后介绍邻居友善热心，经常帮自己解决难题，完成邻居相关要点的描述。
第三段：收尾总结，点明这处家园是享受生活的好地方，收束全文。
3. 语言组织：合理运用there be句型、固定搭配，保证语法准确，语句衔接自然流畅，符合写作要求。
【答案】
My dream home
My dream home is a big house at the foot of a hill. There are many trees and flowers around it. I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. It is far from the city centre so people can take a bus or drive there.
There are two floors in my house. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen and a house cinema. I can have meals and watch films at the same time. On the first floor, there are six rooms. My friends can come and stay with me together at the weekend. I have many neighbours and they are friendly and helpful. They often help me with my problems.
This is my dream home. It is a good place to enjoy life.
【知识点】
情景作文写作，there be句型，要点整合表达
【点评】
本题属于初中英语常见的提示类写作题型，通过思维导图给出清晰的写作维度，既限定了核心写作方向避免学生偏题，也给学生留出了合理的发挥空间，能够有效考察学生的基础语言运用能力和逻辑叙事能力，参考范文结构清晰完整，所有给定要点全部覆盖，语句通顺自然，完全符合题目的各项要求。
【难度系数】
0.6