实战演练
假如你是李华,你校英语广播站正在征集稿件,请你以“My hometown”为题写一篇短文,向大家介绍你的家乡——徐州。
【内容包括】1. 介绍一下你家乡的基本情况(地理位置、人口和著名景点等)。
2. 谈谈到达你家乡著名景点的方式及利弊(至少两种方式)。
3. 表达你对家乡的热爱。
【要求】1. 文中不能出现学校的真实名称和学生的真实姓名。
2. 语句连贯,词数80左右。作文的开头已经给出,不计入总词数。
My hometown
My hometown is Xuzhou,a historic city in northern Jiangsu Province.
假如你是李华,你校英语广播站正在征集稿件,请你以“My hometown”为题写一篇短文,向大家介绍你的家乡——徐州。
【内容包括】1. 介绍一下你家乡的基本情况(地理位置、人口和著名景点等)。
2. 谈谈到达你家乡著名景点的方式及利弊(至少两种方式)。
3. 表达你对家乡的热爱。
【要求】1. 文中不能出现学校的真实名称和学生的真实姓名。
2. 语句连贯,词数80左右。作文的开头已经给出,不计入总词数。
My hometown
My hometown is Xuzhou,a historic city in northern Jiangsu Province.
It has a population of over 9 million and is famous for scenic spots like Yunlong Lake and Xuzhou Han Dynasty Tombs.
You can reach Yunlong Lake by bus or bike. Taking a bus is cheap and convenient, but it may be crowded during rush hours. Riding a bike lets you enjoy the street views along the way, yet it's tiring for long distances.
I'm proud of my hometown's long history and beautiful scenery. I love it deeply and hope more people can visit here.
答案:My hometown
My hometown is Xuzhou, a historic city in northern Jiangsu Province. It has a population of over 9 million and is famous for scenic spots like Yunlong Lake and Xuzhou Han Dynasty Tombs.
You can reach Yunlong Lake by bus or bike. Taking a bus is cheap and convenient, but it may be crowded during rush hours. Riding a bike lets you enjoy the street views along the way, yet it's tiring for long distances.
I'm proud of my hometown's long history and beautiful scenery. I love it deeply and hope more people can visit here.
My hometown is Xuzhou, a historic city in northern Jiangsu Province. It has a population of over 9 million and is famous for scenic spots like Yunlong Lake and Xuzhou Han Dynasty Tombs.
You can reach Yunlong Lake by bus or bike. Taking a bus is cheap and convenient, but it may be crowded during rush hours. Riding a bike lets you enjoy the street views along the way, yet it's tiring for long distances.
I'm proud of my hometown's long history and beautiful scenery. I love it deeply and hope more people can visit here.
解析:
【分析】
首先拿到这道写作题,先明确三个必须覆盖的内容要点,第一步先承接题目已经给出的开头,补充家乡徐州的基础信息:对应第一个要点,补充人口数量、当地知名景点,内容要符合徐州的实际情况。第二步对应第二个要点,选择其中一个知名景点,挑选两种常见的抵达方式,分别清晰写出每种方式的优势和弊端,保证至少两种方式的利弊都表述完整。第三步对应第三个要点,自然抒发自己对家乡的喜爱与自豪感,最后注意控制总词数在80左右,不要出现任何真实的校名、人名,保证语句连贯通顺。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头,先补充家乡基础信息:点明徐州人口超过900万,列举云龙湖、徐州汉墓等当地标志性景点,完成第一个内容要点的书写。
2. 选取云龙湖作为介绍的景点,列出公交、骑行两种抵达方式:说明坐公交的优势是便宜便捷,弊端是高峰时段会拥挤;骑行的优势是可以沿途观赏街景,弊端是长距离骑行会劳累,完整覆盖第二个要点的两种方式及利弊要求。
3. 最后收尾,表达自己为家乡的悠久历史和美景感到自豪,抒发对家乡的热爱,同时发出欢迎大家来游玩的期许,完成第三个情感表达的要点,整体衔接自然,词数符合要求,没有出现违规的真实个人、学校信息。
【答案】
My hometown
My hometown is Xuzhou, a historic city in northern Jiangsu Province. It has a population of over 9 million and is famous for scenic spots like Yunlong Lake and Xuzhou Han Dynasty Tombs.
You can reach Yunlong Lake by bus or bike. Taking a bus is cheap and convenient, but it may be crowded during rush hours. Riding a bike lets you enjoy the street views along the way, yet it's tiring for long distances.
I'm proud of my hometown's long history and beautiful scenery. I love it deeply and hope more people can visit here.
【知识点】
家乡主题写作,出行利弊表达,英语短文谋篇
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干要求的全部三个内容要点,内容贴合徐州本地实际情况,两种出行方式的利弊描述逻辑清晰,情感表达真挚自然,全文语句连贯无语法错误,词数符合80左右的要求,没有出现违规的真实信息,是一篇非常规范的介绍类说明文范文,学生可以参考它的结构搭建方式,学习如何把给定的要点自然串联成通顺的短文。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道写作题,先明确三个必须覆盖的内容要点,第一步先承接题目已经给出的开头,补充家乡徐州的基础信息:对应第一个要点,补充人口数量、当地知名景点,内容要符合徐州的实际情况。第二步对应第二个要点,选择其中一个知名景点,挑选两种常见的抵达方式,分别清晰写出每种方式的优势和弊端,保证至少两种方式的利弊都表述完整。第三步对应第三个要点,自然抒发自己对家乡的喜爱与自豪感,最后注意控制总词数在80左右,不要出现任何真实的校名、人名,保证语句连贯通顺。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头,先补充家乡基础信息:点明徐州人口超过900万,列举云龙湖、徐州汉墓等当地标志性景点,完成第一个内容要点的书写。
2. 选取云龙湖作为介绍的景点,列出公交、骑行两种抵达方式:说明坐公交的优势是便宜便捷,弊端是高峰时段会拥挤;骑行的优势是可以沿途观赏街景,弊端是长距离骑行会劳累,完整覆盖第二个要点的两种方式及利弊要求。
3. 最后收尾,表达自己为家乡的悠久历史和美景感到自豪,抒发对家乡的热爱,同时发出欢迎大家来游玩的期许,完成第三个情感表达的要点,整体衔接自然,词数符合要求,没有出现违规的真实个人、学校信息。
【答案】
My hometown
My hometown is Xuzhou, a historic city in northern Jiangsu Province. It has a population of over 9 million and is famous for scenic spots like Yunlong Lake and Xuzhou Han Dynasty Tombs.
You can reach Yunlong Lake by bus or bike. Taking a bus is cheap and convenient, but it may be crowded during rush hours. Riding a bike lets you enjoy the street views along the way, yet it's tiring for long distances.
I'm proud of my hometown's long history and beautiful scenery. I love it deeply and hope more people can visit here.
【知识点】
家乡主题写作,出行利弊表达,英语短文谋篇
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干要求的全部三个内容要点,内容贴合徐州本地实际情况,两种出行方式的利弊描述逻辑清晰,情感表达真挚自然,全文语句连贯无语法错误,词数符合80左右的要求,没有出现违规的真实信息,是一篇非常规范的介绍类说明文范文,学生可以参考它的结构搭建方式,学习如何把给定的要点自然串联成通顺的短文。
【难度系数】
0.7