六、书面表达
在我们国家众多的河流中,黄河具有举足轻重的地位。请根据下列提示,写一篇80词左右的英语短文来介绍黄河。
The Yellow River is one of the most amazing rivers in China.
Exercise 7 of Unit 6 of 7B Assessment & Further study
在我们国家众多的河流中,黄河具有举足轻重的地位。请根据下列提示,写一篇80词左右的英语短文来介绍黄河。
The Yellow River is one of the most amazing rivers in China.
It is about 5,500 kilometres long.
It rises from the Qinghai-Xizang Plateau and runs through nine provinces to the Bohai Sea.
The water of the Yellow River is fresh water, so everybody can drink it and use it for farming and washing.
It is also home to hundreds of thousands of living things.
Some special types of fish can only survive in this river.
The landscape along the river is very beautiful.
People can take a boat trip and enjoy the nice views along the river.
The Yellow River is China's mother river. We should try our best to protect it.
Exercise 7 of Unit 6 of 7B Assessment & Further study
答案：The Yellow River is one of the most amazing rivers in China. It is about 5,500 kilometres long. It rises from the Qinghai-Xizang Plateau and runs through nine provinces to the Bohai Sea.
The water of the Yellow River is fresh water, so everybody can drink it and use it for farming and washing. It is also home to hundreds of thousands of living things. Some special types of fish can only survive in this river. The landscape along the river is very beautiful. People can take a boat trip and enjoy the nice views along the river.
The Yellow River is China's mother river. We should try our best to protect it.
The water of the Yellow River is fresh water, so everybody can drink it and use it for farming and washing. It is also home to hundreds of thousands of living things. Some special types of fish can only survive in this river. The landscape along the river is very beautiful. People can take a boat trip and enjoy the nice views along the river.
The Yellow River is China's mother river. We should try our best to protect it.
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要明确写作要求：主题是介绍黄河，词数约80词，必须覆盖图中给出的所有提示信息。接下来梳理行文逻辑，按照从基础概况到价值意义的顺序展开：先承接题目给出的开头，把长度、发源地、流经区域、入海口这些基础地理信息自然串联，不要生硬逐条罗列；之后对应提示里的淡水、生物家园、美景三个点展开黄河的价值，补充少量符合常识的合理细节让内容不空洞，最后收尾点明黄河的地位，发出保护倡议，最后通读检查语法错误，调整语句让衔接流畅，符合字数要求。
【解析】
写作可按照三步完成：
1. 承接给定开头，首先输出黄河的基础地理信息：说明黄河全长约5500千米，发源于青藏高原，流经9个省份，最终注入渤海，用并列连词衔接多个信息点，避免句式零散。
2. 接着介绍黄河的多元价值：首先点明黄河是淡水资源，可满足饮用、农业生产等用水需求；再说明黄河是大量生物的栖息地，存在特有物种；最后描述黄河沿岸风光秀丽，可供人们游览欣赏。
3. 最后补充收尾内容，点明黄河是中国的母亲河，呼吁大家尽力保护它，整体调整语句，保证语法正确、逻辑通顺，符合初中英语写作的规范。
【答案】
The Yellow River is one of the most amazing rivers in China. It is about 5,500 kilometres long. It rises from the Qinghai-Xizang Plateau and runs through nine provinces to the Bohai Sea.
The water of the Yellow River is fresh water, so everybody can drink it and use it for farming and washing. It is also home to hundreds of thousands of living things. Some special types of fish can only survive in this river. The landscape along the river is very beautiful. People can take a boat trip and enjoy the nice views along the river.
The Yellow River is China's mother river. We should try our best to protect it.
【知识点】
事物介绍类写作，地理主题英文表达，语篇衔接技巧
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题目给出的全部提示要点，行文逻辑清晰，按照基础概况-价值介绍-主题升华的顺序展开，没有生硬堆砌信息，补充的细节合理自然，语句流畅，完全符合七年级英语书面表达的评分要求，是一篇优秀的示范习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要明确写作要求：主题是介绍黄河，词数约80词，必须覆盖图中给出的所有提示信息。接下来梳理行文逻辑，按照从基础概况到价值意义的顺序展开：先承接题目给出的开头，把长度、发源地、流经区域、入海口这些基础地理信息自然串联，不要生硬逐条罗列；之后对应提示里的淡水、生物家园、美景三个点展开黄河的价值，补充少量符合常识的合理细节让内容不空洞，最后收尾点明黄河的地位，发出保护倡议，最后通读检查语法错误，调整语句让衔接流畅，符合字数要求。
【解析】
写作可按照三步完成：
1. 承接给定开头，首先输出黄河的基础地理信息：说明黄河全长约5500千米，发源于青藏高原，流经9个省份，最终注入渤海，用并列连词衔接多个信息点，避免句式零散。
2. 接着介绍黄河的多元价值：首先点明黄河是淡水资源，可满足饮用、农业生产等用水需求；再说明黄河是大量生物的栖息地，存在特有物种；最后描述黄河沿岸风光秀丽，可供人们游览欣赏。
3. 最后补充收尾内容，点明黄河是中国的母亲河，呼吁大家尽力保护它，整体调整语句，保证语法正确、逻辑通顺，符合初中英语写作的规范。
【答案】
The Yellow River is one of the most amazing rivers in China. It is about 5,500 kilometres long. It rises from the Qinghai-Xizang Plateau and runs through nine provinces to the Bohai Sea.
The water of the Yellow River is fresh water, so everybody can drink it and use it for farming and washing. It is also home to hundreds of thousands of living things. Some special types of fish can only survive in this river. The landscape along the river is very beautiful. People can take a boat trip and enjoy the nice views along the river.
The Yellow River is China's mother river. We should try our best to protect it.
【知识点】
事物介绍类写作，地理主题英文表达，语篇衔接技巧
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题目给出的全部提示要点，行文逻辑清晰，按照基础概况-价值介绍-主题升华的顺序展开，没有生硬堆砌信息，补充的细节合理自然，语句流畅，完全符合七年级英语书面表达的评分要求，是一篇优秀的示范习作。
【难度系数】
0.6