实战演练
（2025·江苏泰州靖江八校联盟调研）China Daily 报社正在举行题为“My dream home”的征文活动，请根据下面的思维导图描述你的梦想家园。
【要求】1. 表达清楚，书写工整，语法正确，上下文连贯。
2. 必须包括所有要点提示，并适当发挥。
3. 词数不少于 80。
4. 不得使用真实姓名和校名等。
My dream home
（2025·江苏泰州靖江八校联盟调研）China Daily 报社正在举行题为“My dream home”的征文活动，请根据下面的思维导图描述你的梦想家园。
【要求】1. 表达清楚，书写工整，语法正确，上下文连贯。
2. 必须包括所有要点提示，并适当发挥。
3. 词数不少于 80。
4. 不得使用真实姓名和校名等。
My dream home
My dream home is a big house at the foot of a hill. There are many trees and flowers around it. Every day, I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. It is far from the city centre so people can take a bus or drive there.
There are two floors in my house. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen and a house cinema. I can have meals and watch films at the same time. On the first floor, there are six rooms. My friends can come and stay with me together at the weekend. I have many neighbours and they are friendly and helpful. They often help me with my problems.
This is my dream home. It is a good place to enjoy life.
答案：实战演练
One possible version
My dream home
My dream home is a big house at the foot of a hill. There are many trees and flowers around it. Every day, I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. It is far from the city centre so people can take a bus or drive there.
There are two floors in my house. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen and a house cinema. I can have meals and watch films at the same time. On the first floor, there are six rooms. My friends can come and stay with me together at the weekend. I have many neighbours and they are friendly and helpful. They often help me with my problems.
This is my dream home. It is a good place to enjoy life.
One possible version
My dream home
My dream home is a big house at the foot of a hill. There are many trees and flowers around it. Every day, I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. It is far from the city centre so people can take a bus or drive there.
There are two floors in my house. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen and a house cinema. I can have meals and watch films at the same time. On the first floor, there are six rooms. My friends can come and stay with me together at the weekend. I have many neighbours and they are friendly and helpful. They often help me with my problems.
This is my dream home. It is a good place to enjoy life.
解析：
【分析】
这是一篇要点提示类的命题英语写作题，解题时首先要先梳理思维导图给出的全部要求，确保不遗漏任何提示点：首先要依次回应所有给出的问题：家园的位置、周边环境、屋内的设施、可以在家中开展的活动、邻居的特点并给出对应例子、家园距离市中心的距离、前往的交通方式。接下来梳理行文逻辑：开篇先点明梦想家园的整体位置和周边环境，接着说明它和市中心的距离以及对应的交通方式，之后详细介绍房屋内部的布局和可以做的活动，再介绍邻居的特点并补充具体事例，最后收尾表达对梦想家园的喜爱，适当补充细节让上下文连贯，保证词数达标、语法正确即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 审题确定基础要素：体裁为介绍类说明文，使用第一人称，整体时态以一般现在时为主，必须覆盖思维导图全部8个提示问题，词数不少于80，不得出现真实个人信息。
2. 搭建行文框架：
① 开篇段：直接点题，介绍梦想家园坐落在山脚下，周边有花和树，同时说明它远离市中心，人们可以坐公交或者自驾前往，回应位置、周边环境、距离、交通四个要点。
② 主体段：介绍房屋一共两层，一楼有厨房和家庭影院，可以在这里用餐、看电影，二楼有多个房间，可以邀请朋友周末来同住，接着介绍邻居都友善热心，经常帮忙解决问题，回应屋内设施、在家可做的事、邻居特点加举例的剩余要点。
③ 收尾段：总结点出这是适合享受生活的好地方，收束全文。
3. 串联内容，调整语句衔接，保证语法正确、行文流畅，最终得到符合要求的作文。
【答案】
My dream home
My dream home is a big house at the foot of a hill. There are many trees and flowers around it. Every day, I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. It is far from the city centre so people can take a bus or drive there.
There are two floors in my house. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen and a house cinema. I can have meals and watch films at the same time. On the first floor, there are six rooms. My friends can come and stay with me together at the weekend. I have many neighbours and they are friendly and helpful. They often help me with my problems.
This is my dream home. It is a good place to enjoy life.
【知识点】
英语命题作文写作，一般现在时应用，要点类作文谋篇布局
【点评】
本题属于初中英语常见的提示类写作题型，思维导图已经明确给出全部写作要点，降低了审题的难度，学生只需要按照合理的逻辑顺序把所有要点串联，适当补充细节让语句连贯，就可以完成合格的作文，既考察学生对场景描述、日常表达的基础词汇和句式的掌握，也锻炼学生的写作谋篇能力，需要注意不要遗漏邻居部分要给出具体事例的要求。
【难度系数】
0.7
这是一篇要点提示类的命题英语写作题，解题时首先要先梳理思维导图给出的全部要求，确保不遗漏任何提示点：首先要依次回应所有给出的问题：家园的位置、周边环境、屋内的设施、可以在家中开展的活动、邻居的特点并给出对应例子、家园距离市中心的距离、前往的交通方式。接下来梳理行文逻辑：开篇先点明梦想家园的整体位置和周边环境，接着说明它和市中心的距离以及对应的交通方式，之后详细介绍房屋内部的布局和可以做的活动，再介绍邻居的特点并补充具体事例，最后收尾表达对梦想家园的喜爱，适当补充细节让上下文连贯，保证词数达标、语法正确即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 审题确定基础要素：体裁为介绍类说明文，使用第一人称，整体时态以一般现在时为主，必须覆盖思维导图全部8个提示问题，词数不少于80，不得出现真实个人信息。
2. 搭建行文框架：
① 开篇段：直接点题，介绍梦想家园坐落在山脚下，周边有花和树，同时说明它远离市中心，人们可以坐公交或者自驾前往，回应位置、周边环境、距离、交通四个要点。
② 主体段：介绍房屋一共两层，一楼有厨房和家庭影院，可以在这里用餐、看电影，二楼有多个房间，可以邀请朋友周末来同住，接着介绍邻居都友善热心，经常帮忙解决问题，回应屋内设施、在家可做的事、邻居特点加举例的剩余要点。
③ 收尾段：总结点出这是适合享受生活的好地方，收束全文。
3. 串联内容，调整语句衔接，保证语法正确、行文流畅，最终得到符合要求的作文。
【答案】
My dream home
My dream home is a big house at the foot of a hill. There are many trees and flowers around it. Every day, I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. It is far from the city centre so people can take a bus or drive there.
There are two floors in my house. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen and a house cinema. I can have meals and watch films at the same time. On the first floor, there are six rooms. My friends can come and stay with me together at the weekend. I have many neighbours and they are friendly and helpful. They often help me with my problems.
This is my dream home. It is a good place to enjoy life.
【知识点】
英语命题作文写作，一般现在时应用，要点类作文谋篇布局
【点评】
本题属于初中英语常见的提示类写作题型，思维导图已经明确给出全部写作要点，降低了审题的难度，学生只需要按照合理的逻辑顺序把所有要点串联，适当补充细节让语句连贯，就可以完成合格的作文，既考察学生对场景描述、日常表达的基础词汇和句式的掌握，也锻炼学生的写作谋篇能力，需要注意不要遗漏邻居部分要给出具体事例的要求。
【难度系数】
0.7