典型例题
动物是人类的好朋友。每个人都有自己喜爱的动物。你最喜欢什么动物呢?请以“My Favourite Animal”为题,根据下面要求,写一篇短文。
写作要求:1. 你最喜欢的动物是什么,你为什么喜欢它;2. 简单介绍一下这种动物;3. 说一下自己对这种动物的感受;4. 词数70左右。
My Favourite Animal
思路点拨
本文要求学生介绍自己最喜爱的动物,应是一篇说明文;时态为一般现在时;根据所给提示完成写作,避免语法错误,可适当发挥,同时注意上下文之间的逻辑关系,语意连贯。第一步,点明自己最喜爱的动物并阐述喜爱的理由;第二步,简单介绍自己最喜爱的动物;第三步,表达自己的感受。
范文欣赏
My Favourite Animal
Animals are our friends. What animal do you like best? For me, my favourite animal is the monkey.
I like monkeys because they are very cute. They can do many things just like humans. They can climb the trees quickly and they eat food with their hands easily. I often go to the zoo to watch monkeys. Monkeys like bananas very much. Every time I go to the zoo, I buy some bananas to feed them. I always enjoy myself with them.
What about you? What's your favourite animal?
动物是人类的好朋友。每个人都有自己喜爱的动物。你最喜欢什么动物呢?请以“My Favourite Animal”为题,根据下面要求,写一篇短文。
写作要求:1. 你最喜欢的动物是什么,你为什么喜欢它;2. 简单介绍一下这种动物;3. 说一下自己对这种动物的感受;4. 词数70左右。
My Favourite Animal
思路点拨
本文要求学生介绍自己最喜爱的动物,应是一篇说明文;时态为一般现在时;根据所给提示完成写作,避免语法错误,可适当发挥,同时注意上下文之间的逻辑关系,语意连贯。第一步,点明自己最喜爱的动物并阐述喜爱的理由;第二步,简单介绍自己最喜爱的动物;第三步,表达自己的感受。
范文欣赏
My Favourite Animal
Animals are our friends. What animal do you like best? For me, my favourite animal is the monkey.
I like monkeys because they are very cute. They can do many things just like humans. They can climb the trees quickly and they eat food with their hands easily. I often go to the zoo to watch monkeys. Monkeys like bananas very much. Every time I go to the zoo, I buy some bananas to feed them. I always enjoy myself with them.
What about you? What's your favourite animal?
答案：My Favourite Animal
Animals are our friends. What animal do you like best? For me, my favourite animal is the monkey.
I like monkeys because they are very cute. They can do many things just like humans. They can climb the trees quickly and they eat food with their hands easily. I often go to the zoo to watch monkeys. Monkeys like bananas very much. Every time I go to the zoo, I buy some bananas to feed them. I always enjoy myself with them.
What about you? What's your favourite animal?
Animals are our friends. What animal do you like best? For me, my favourite animal is the monkey.
I like monkeys because they are very cute. They can do many things just like humans. They can climb the trees quickly and they eat food with their hands easily. I often go to the zoo to watch monkeys. Monkeys like bananas very much. Every time I go to the zoo, I buy some bananas to feed them. I always enjoy myself with them.
What about you? What's your favourite animal?
解析：
本文是一篇说明文写作，需使用一般现在时进行创作。写作需遵循以下步骤：首先点明自己最喜欢的动物并说明喜爱的理由；接着简单介绍该动物的相关特点；最后表达自己对这种动物的感受。写作时要保证语意连贯，语法正确，词数控制在70左右。
假设你是李华,你的英国笔友Tom在邮件中询问你最喜欢的中国独有的动物,并希望了解它的特点及保护意义。请根据以下提示,给Tom回一封邮件。
邮件要点:1. 介绍你最喜欢的中国独有的动物(如大熊猫、金丝猴等);2. 描述它的外貌、习性或有趣的特点;3. 说明该动物面临的生存挑战及保护它的重要性。
写作要求:1.邮件需涵盖所有要点,可适当拓展细节;2.词数不少于70,开头与结尾已给出,不计入总词数;3.文中不得出现真实姓名、学校等个人信息。
Dear Tom,
Glad to hear from you! You asked about my favourite Chinese animal, so let me tell you
Best wishes,
Li Hua
邮件要点:1. 介绍你最喜欢的中国独有的动物(如大熊猫、金丝猴等);2. 描述它的外貌、习性或有趣的特点;3. 说明该动物面临的生存挑战及保护它的重要性。
写作要求:1.邮件需涵盖所有要点,可适当拓展细节;2.词数不少于70,开头与结尾已给出,不计入总词数;3.文中不得出现真实姓名、学校等个人信息。
Dear Tom,
Glad to hear from you! You asked about my favourite Chinese animal, so let me tell you
something about pandas.
Pandas are lovely and smart. They are also a symbol of
China. With their black-and-white fur, they look very cute.
Pandas are friendly to people, and they can even do some
funny tricks! However, pandas are in danger now. Their
living places are getting smaller, so we must protect them.
We should save pandas because they are important to nature.
What's your favourite animal? Write back soon!
Best wishes,
Li Hua
答案：写作能力突破
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
Glad to hear from you! You asked about my favourite
Chinese animal, so let me tell you something about pandas.
Pandas are lovely and smart. They are also a symbol of
China. With their black-and-white fur, they look very cute.
Pandas are friendly to people, and they can even do some
funny tricks! However, pandas are in danger now. Their
living places are getting smaller, so we must protect them.
We should save pandas because they are important to nature.
What's your favourite animal? Write back soon!
Best wishes,
Li Hua
思路引导
[总体分析]
①体裁:本文要求学生介绍自己最喜欢的中国独有动物,
应是一篇说明文;②时态:一般现在时;③提示:根据提示
写出所有要点,适当发挥,语句连贯。
[写作步骤]
第一步,开头点题,介绍自己最喜欢的中国独有的动物;第
二步,具体描述这种动物的特点;第三步,阐述这种动物
面临的生存挑战以及保护它们的原因;最后,询问对方最
喜欢的动物并期待回复。
[亮点短语]
①a symbol of...……的象征 ②in danger处于危险中
③living place生活的地方
[高分句型]
We should save pandas because they are important to
nature.(because引导原因状语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
Glad to hear from you! You asked about my favourite
Chinese animal, so let me tell you something about pandas.
Pandas are lovely and smart. They are also a symbol of
China. With their black-and-white fur, they look very cute.
Pandas are friendly to people, and they can even do some
funny tricks! However, pandas are in danger now. Their
living places are getting smaller, so we must protect them.
We should save pandas because they are important to nature.
What's your favourite animal? Write back soon!
Best wishes,
Li Hua
思路引导
[总体分析]
①体裁:本文要求学生介绍自己最喜欢的中国独有动物,
应是一篇说明文;②时态:一般现在时;③提示:根据提示
写出所有要点,适当发挥,语句连贯。
[写作步骤]
第一步,开头点题,介绍自己最喜欢的中国独有的动物;第
二步,具体描述这种动物的特点;第三步,阐述这种动物
面临的生存挑战以及保护它们的原因;最后,询问对方最
喜欢的动物并期待回复。
[亮点短语]
①a symbol of...……的象征 ②in danger处于危险中
③living place生活的地方
[高分句型]
We should save pandas because they are important to
nature.(because引导原因状语从句)
解析：
【分析】
首先明确这是一篇邮件形式的说明文，写作时态以一般现在时为主。解题思路如下：第一步，直接回应Tom的问题，点明自己最喜欢的中国独有动物是大熊猫；第二步，从外貌、习性、象征意义等方面展开描述，让动物形象更鲜活；第三步，阐述大熊猫面临的生存挑战，再说明保护它的重要性，紧扣题目要求；最后添加互动内容，询问对方喜欢的动物，符合邮件的交际属性，确保内容连贯自然且覆盖所有要点。
【解析】
1. 开头点题：用“so let me tell you something about pandas.”直接引出要介绍的动物，回应对方的问题。
2. 描述动物特点：先点明大熊猫是中国的象征，再通过“With their black-and-white fur, they look very cute.”描述外貌，用“Pandas are friendly to people, and they can even do some funny tricks!”补充习性，丰富动物形象。
3. 阐述生存挑战与保护意义：用“However, pandas are in danger now.”引出濒危现状，说明原因“Their living places are getting smaller”，再用because引导的原因状语从句“We should save pandas because they are important to nature.”说明保护的重要性。
4. 结尾互动：以“What's your favourite animal? Write back soon!”询问对方，增强邮件的交流性。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
Glad to hear from you! You asked about my favourite
Chinese animal, so let me tell you something about pandas.
Pandas are lovely and smart. They are also a symbol of
China. With their black-and-white fur, they look very cute.
Pandas are friendly to people, and they can even do some
funny tricks! However, pandas are in danger now. Their
living places are getting smaller, so we must protect them.
We should save pandas because they are important to nature.
What's your favourite animal? Write back soon!
Best wishes,
Li Hua
【知识点】
1. 邮件类应用文写作
2. 动物类说明文写作
3. 一般现在时的运用
【点评】
这篇范文紧扣题目所有要点，内容完整、逻辑清晰。语言简洁流畅，运用了“a symbol of...”“in danger”等亮点短语，还使用了because引导的原因状语从句提升句式丰富度，结尾的互动部分也符合邮件的交际特性，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先明确这是一篇邮件形式的说明文，写作时态以一般现在时为主。解题思路如下：第一步，直接回应Tom的问题，点明自己最喜欢的中国独有动物是大熊猫；第二步，从外貌、习性、象征意义等方面展开描述，让动物形象更鲜活；第三步，阐述大熊猫面临的生存挑战，再说明保护它的重要性，紧扣题目要求；最后添加互动内容，询问对方喜欢的动物，符合邮件的交际属性，确保内容连贯自然且覆盖所有要点。
【解析】
1. 开头点题：用“so let me tell you something about pandas.”直接引出要介绍的动物，回应对方的问题。
2. 描述动物特点：先点明大熊猫是中国的象征，再通过“With their black-and-white fur, they look very cute.”描述外貌，用“Pandas are friendly to people, and they can even do some funny tricks!”补充习性，丰富动物形象。
3. 阐述生存挑战与保护意义：用“However, pandas are in danger now.”引出濒危现状，说明原因“Their living places are getting smaller”，再用because引导的原因状语从句“We should save pandas because they are important to nature.”说明保护的重要性。
4. 结尾互动：以“What's your favourite animal? Write back soon!”询问对方，增强邮件的交流性。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
Glad to hear from you! You asked about my favourite
Chinese animal, so let me tell you something about pandas.
Pandas are lovely and smart. They are also a symbol of
China. With their black-and-white fur, they look very cute.
Pandas are friendly to people, and they can even do some
funny tricks! However, pandas are in danger now. Their
living places are getting smaller, so we must protect them.
We should save pandas because they are important to nature.
What's your favourite animal? Write back soon!
Best wishes,
Li Hua
【知识点】
1. 邮件类应用文写作
2. 动物类说明文写作
3. 一般现在时的运用
【点评】
这篇范文紧扣题目所有要点，内容完整、逻辑清晰。语言简洁流畅，运用了“a symbol of...”“in danger”等亮点短语，还使用了because引导的原因状语从句提升句式丰富度，结尾的互动部分也符合邮件的交际特性，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.7