典型例题
请根据以下故事梗概,以"A Little Pig"为题,写一篇童话故事。
故事梗概:
1. 一只小猪在父母睡着后偷偷跑了出去;
2. 他在路上遇见一头大象、一只孔雀和一只兔子;
3. 他想拥有大象的鼻子、孔雀的尾巴和兔子的耳朵;
4. 当他实现了梦想时,他的父母却不认识他了。
提示词:peacock 孔雀;tail 尾巴;recognize 认出
要求:
1. 展开适当的想象,语句通顺;
2. 70词左右。
A Little Pig
思路点拨
本文是一篇记叙文,以一般过去时为主。内容要点已给出,学生应按要求进行写作,不可遗漏任何信息提示。要注意适当添加细节,使行文连贯。写作步骤:第一步,交代故事的背景,即小猪离开了父母;第二步,详细讲述小猪在路上发生的故事;第三步,分享故事给予我们的启示。
范文欣赏
A Little Pig
Danny is a little pig. It was a sunny day.
Danny went away when his parents were asleep.
On his way, he met an elephant, a peacock and a rabbit. He said,"I wish I could have an elephant's nose, a peacock's tail and a rabbit's ears." Danny's wish came true. He ran back.
But his parents couldn't recognize him,"Go away. You're not our son." Danny was sad. He ran out and cried,"I just want to be a pig." Finally, he became a pig again. How happy he was!
From the story, I know that we should just be ourselves.
请根据以下故事梗概,以"A Little Pig"为题,写一篇童话故事。
故事梗概:
1. 一只小猪在父母睡着后偷偷跑了出去;
2. 他在路上遇见一头大象、一只孔雀和一只兔子;
3. 他想拥有大象的鼻子、孔雀的尾巴和兔子的耳朵;
4. 当他实现了梦想时,他的父母却不认识他了。
提示词:peacock 孔雀;tail 尾巴;recognize 认出
要求:
1. 展开适当的想象,语句通顺;
2. 70词左右。
A Little Pig
思路点拨
本文是一篇记叙文,以一般过去时为主。内容要点已给出,学生应按要求进行写作,不可遗漏任何信息提示。要注意适当添加细节,使行文连贯。写作步骤:第一步,交代故事的背景,即小猪离开了父母;第二步,详细讲述小猪在路上发生的故事;第三步,分享故事给予我们的启示。
范文欣赏
A Little Pig
Danny is a little pig. It was a sunny day.
Danny went away when his parents were asleep.
On his way, he met an elephant, a peacock and a rabbit. He said,"I wish I could have an elephant's nose, a peacock's tail and a rabbit's ears." Danny's wish came true. He ran back.
But his parents couldn't recognize him,"Go away. You're not our son." Danny was sad. He ran out and cried,"I just want to be a pig." Finally, he became a pig again. How happy he was!
From the story, I know that we should just be ourselves.
答案：A Little Pig
Danny is a little pig. It was a sunny day.
Danny went away when his parents were asleep.
On his way, he met an elephant, a peacock and a rabbit. He said,"I wish I could have an elephant's nose, a peacock's tail and a rabbit's ears." Danny's wish came true. He ran back.
But his parents couldn't recognize him,"Go away. You're not our son." Danny was sad. He ran out and cried,"I just want to be a pig." Finally, he became a pig again. How happy he was!
From the story, I know that we should just be ourselves.
Danny is a little pig. It was a sunny day.
Danny went away when his parents were asleep.
On his way, he met an elephant, a peacock and a rabbit. He said,"I wish I could have an elephant's nose, a peacock's tail and a rabbit's ears." Danny's wish came true. He ran back.
But his parents couldn't recognize him,"Go away. You're not our son." Danny was sad. He ran out and cried,"I just want to be a pig." Finally, he became a pig again. How happy he was!
From the story, I know that we should just be ourselves.
解析：
本文要求以“A Little Pig”为题创作一篇童话故事，需以一般过去时为主要时态，涵盖小猪趁父母熟睡偷跑出门、途中遇见大象、孔雀和兔子、渴望拥有它们的身体部位、愿望实现后父母却认不出他这些核心要点，同时可适当添加细节使行文连贯，最后可点明故事蕴含的道理，词数控制在70左右。
从前,森林里住着一只老虎。所有的动物都怕他,因为老虎有一天会吃掉它们。一只猴子不想让老虎住在这里。最后,猴子想出了一个办法,把老虎引到河边,老虎在河里看到了另一只老虎……请用英语续写这个故事,70词左右。
提示词:die 死
Once upon a time, there lived a tiger in the forest. All the animals were afraid of him. A monkey didn't want to let the tiger live here.
提示词:die 死
Once upon a time, there lived a tiger in the forest. All the animals were afraid of him. A monkey didn't want to let the tiger live here.
One day, the monkey said to the tiger,"Hey, Mr Tiger.
Do you know another tiger also lives here? He said he wasn't
afraid of you at all." The tiger was very angry. He asked the
monkey to take him to see it. The monkey took the tiger to a
river. "Look into the river, Mr Tiger. There he is." The
tiger looked into the river and found another tiger was looking
at him angrily. He jumped into the river and died.
答案：One possible version:
Once upon a time, there lived a tiger in the forest. All
the animals were afraid of him. A monkey didn't want to let
the tiger live here.
One day, the monkey said to the tiger,"Hey, Mr Tiger.
Do you know another tiger also lives here? He said he wasn't
afraid of you at all." The tiger was very angry. He asked the
monkey to take him to see it. The monkey took the tiger to a
river. "Look into the river, Mr Tiger. There he is." The
tiger looked into the river and found another tiger was looking
at him angrily. He jumped into the river and died.
→ not...at all 一点也不
Once upon a time, there lived a tiger in the forest. All
the animals were afraid of him. A monkey didn't want to let
the tiger live here.
One day, the monkey said to the tiger,"Hey, Mr Tiger.
Do you know another tiger also lives here? He said he wasn't
afraid of you at all." The tiger was very angry. He asked the
monkey to take him to see it. The monkey took the tiger to a
river. "Look into the river, Mr Tiger. There he is." The
tiger looked into the river and found another tiger was looking
at him angrily. He jumped into the river and died.
→ not...at all 一点也不
解析：
【分析】
首先要衔接给定开头，围绕猴子的计谋展开续写：第一步设计猴子用谎言激怒老虎，编造另一只老虎挑衅的情节，契合引老虎到河边的设定；第二步引导老虎到河边，让它把倒影当成另一只老虎；第三步写出老虎愤怒跳河淹死的结局，用上提示词“die”，同时控制字数在要求范围内，全篇保持一般过去时的叙事时态。
【解析】
1. 衔接开篇：用“One day, the monkey said to the tiger..."引出猴子的计谋，通过对话制造冲突，用“not...at all”短语强化挑衅语气，成功激怒老虎。
2. 推进情节：安排猴子带老虎到河边，用“Look into the river, Mr Tiger. There he is."引导老虎注意水中倒影，推动故事发展。
3. 收束结局：描写老虎看到倒影后的愤怒反应，最终以“He jumped into the river and died."呼应提示词，完成故事，全程保持一般过去时，符合叙事语境，字数符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Once upon a time, there lived a tiger in the forest. All
the animals were afraid of him. A monkey didn't want to let
the tiger live here.
One day, the monkey said to the tiger,"Hey, Mr Tiger.
Do you know another tiger also lives here? He said he wasn't
afraid of you at all." The tiger was very angry. He asked the
monkey to take him to see it. The monkey took the tiger to a
river. "Look into the river, Mr Tiger. There he is." The
tiger looked into the river and found another tiger was looking
at him angrily. He jumped into the river and died.
【知识点】
1. 一般过去时运用
2. not...at all短语
3. 英语故事续写
【点评】
本次续写情节连贯合理，巧妙利用老虎的鲁莽设计计谋，精准呼应题目要求与提示词；语言简洁地道，对话生动形象，符合故事叙事逻辑，且严格控制了字数，是一篇优质的续写范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先要衔接给定开头，围绕猴子的计谋展开续写：第一步设计猴子用谎言激怒老虎，编造另一只老虎挑衅的情节，契合引老虎到河边的设定；第二步引导老虎到河边，让它把倒影当成另一只老虎；第三步写出老虎愤怒跳河淹死的结局，用上提示词“die”，同时控制字数在要求范围内，全篇保持一般过去时的叙事时态。
【解析】
1. 衔接开篇：用“One day, the monkey said to the tiger..."引出猴子的计谋，通过对话制造冲突，用“not...at all”短语强化挑衅语气，成功激怒老虎。
2. 推进情节：安排猴子带老虎到河边，用“Look into the river, Mr Tiger. There he is."引导老虎注意水中倒影，推动故事发展。
3. 收束结局：描写老虎看到倒影后的愤怒反应，最终以“He jumped into the river and died."呼应提示词，完成故事，全程保持一般过去时，符合叙事语境，字数符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Once upon a time, there lived a tiger in the forest. All
the animals were afraid of him. A monkey didn't want to let
the tiger live here.
One day, the monkey said to the tiger,"Hey, Mr Tiger.
Do you know another tiger also lives here? He said he wasn't
afraid of you at all." The tiger was very angry. He asked the
monkey to take him to see it. The monkey took the tiger to a
river. "Look into the river, Mr Tiger. There he is." The
tiger looked into the river and found another tiger was looking
at him angrily. He jumped into the river and died.
【知识点】
1. 一般过去时运用
2. not...at all短语
3. 英语故事续写
【点评】
本次续写情节连贯合理，巧妙利用老虎的鲁莽设计计谋，精准呼应题目要求与提示词；语言简洁地道，对话生动形象，符合故事叙事逻辑，且严格控制了字数，是一篇优质的续写范文。
【难度系数】
0.6