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(2025·江苏宿迁经济技术开发区第一实验学校调研)动物是人类的朋友。学校英语俱乐部将组织题为“My favourite animal”的征文比赛，请根据下列提示，写一篇短文参赛。
【要求】1. 词数80左右。
2. 要点齐全，不要逐字翻译，可适当增加细节使文章连贯、通顺。
My favourite animal
(2025·江苏宿迁经济技术开发区第一实验学校调研)动物是人类的朋友。学校英语俱乐部将组织题为“My favourite animal”的征文比赛，请根据下列提示，写一篇短文参赛。
【要求】1. 词数80左右。
2. 要点齐全，不要逐字翻译，可适当增加细节使文章连贯、通顺。
My favourite animal
I have a lovely dog, and it's my favourite animal. This is a corgi. It's black and brown and its legs are very short. I call it Leo. It's two years old.
It likes chicken and beef very much. It likes playing with me. We go to the park every evening. When I am lying on the grass, it will sit near me.
It can help me do many things and make me laugh. It can accompany me when my parents are not at home.
All my friends love my dog very much! What a lovely dog!
I love my dog and it loves me too!
答案：My favourite animal
I have a lovely dog, and it's my favourite animal. This is a corgi. It's black and brown and its legs are very short. I call it Leo. It's two years old.
It likes chicken and beef very much. It likes playing with me. We go to the park every evening. When I am lying on the grass, it will sit near me. It can help me do many things and make me laugh. It can accompany me when my parents are not at home. All my friends love my dog very much! What a lovely dog!
I love my dog and it loves me too!
I have a lovely dog, and it's my favourite animal. This is a corgi. It's black and brown and its legs are very short. I call it Leo. It's two years old.
It likes chicken and beef very much. It likes playing with me. We go to the park every evening. When I am lying on the grass, it will sit near me. It can help me do many things and make me laugh. It can accompany me when my parents are not at home. All my friends love my dog very much! What a lovely dog!
I love my dog and it loves me too!
解析：
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，我们可以按三步思路来完成：第一步，先选定自己熟悉、有内容可输出的动物，避免选择过于冷门的动物导致无内容可写，这里选择日常很常见的宠物狗作为写作对象，贴近生活容易抒发真情实感；第二步，对照题目给出的表格提示梳理写作逻辑框架，依次安排四个模块的内容：先点明最喜欢的动物是什么，再描述它的颜色、外形等外貌特征，接着介绍它的饮食偏好、活动习惯等生活特性，最后列出至少两点喜欢它的原因；第三步，在填充内容时不要生硬逐字翻译提示，适当补充名字、日常互动等小细节让文章更流畅自然，控制总词数在要求范围内，同时保证语法正确。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：直接引出写作对象，交代基础信息，说明自己最喜欢的动物是自家的柯基犬，补充名字、年龄的小细节让内容更真实。
2. 外貌描写：紧扣要求写出它的毛色是黑棕相间，四肢很短的核心外形特征，突出它的可爱属性。
3. 习性介绍：写出它爱吃鸡肉和牛肉的饮食特点，补充每天傍晚和主人去公园散步的日常活动，符合生活逻辑。
4. 说明喜爱原因：分别写出它能逗主人开心、父母不在家时陪伴主人两个核心原因，满足至少两点的要求。
5. 收尾抒情：最后用简短语句双向点明人和宠物的感情，收束全文，通读调整语句通顺度，检查语法错误和词数，最终完成符合要求的短文。
【答案】
My favourite animal
I have a lovely dog, and it's my favourite animal. This is a corgi. It's black and brown and its legs are very short. I call it Leo. It's two years old.
It likes chicken and beef very much. It likes playing with me. We go to the park every evening. When I am lying on the grass, it will sit near me. It can help me do many things and make me laugh. It can accompany me when my parents are not at home. All my friends love my dog very much! What a lovely dog!
I love my dog and it loves me too!
【知识点】
英语话题写作，一般现在时运用，动物类词汇表达
【点评】
这篇习作完整覆盖了题目所有要求的要点，没有生硬直译提示内容，补充了大量生活化的互动细节，情感真挚自然，语句通顺流畅，词数符合要求，完全契合本次征文的主题，是一篇质量很高的参赛作品。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题，我们可以按三步思路来完成：第一步，先选定自己熟悉、有内容可输出的动物，避免选择过于冷门的动物导致无内容可写，这里选择日常很常见的宠物狗作为写作对象，贴近生活容易抒发真情实感；第二步，对照题目给出的表格提示梳理写作逻辑框架，依次安排四个模块的内容：先点明最喜欢的动物是什么，再描述它的颜色、外形等外貌特征，接着介绍它的饮食偏好、活动习惯等生活特性，最后列出至少两点喜欢它的原因；第三步，在填充内容时不要生硬逐字翻译提示，适当补充名字、日常互动等小细节让文章更流畅自然，控制总词数在要求范围内，同时保证语法正确。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：直接引出写作对象，交代基础信息，说明自己最喜欢的动物是自家的柯基犬，补充名字、年龄的小细节让内容更真实。
2. 外貌描写：紧扣要求写出它的毛色是黑棕相间，四肢很短的核心外形特征，突出它的可爱属性。
3. 习性介绍：写出它爱吃鸡肉和牛肉的饮食特点，补充每天傍晚和主人去公园散步的日常活动，符合生活逻辑。
4. 说明喜爱原因：分别写出它能逗主人开心、父母不在家时陪伴主人两个核心原因，满足至少两点的要求。
5. 收尾抒情：最后用简短语句双向点明人和宠物的感情，收束全文，通读调整语句通顺度，检查语法错误和词数，最终完成符合要求的短文。
【答案】
My favourite animal
I have a lovely dog, and it's my favourite animal. This is a corgi. It's black and brown and its legs are very short. I call it Leo. It's two years old.
It likes chicken and beef very much. It likes playing with me. We go to the park every evening. When I am lying on the grass, it will sit near me. It can help me do many things and make me laugh. It can accompany me when my parents are not at home. All my friends love my dog very much! What a lovely dog!
I love my dog and it loves me too!
【知识点】
英语话题写作，一般现在时运用，动物类词汇表达
【点评】
这篇习作完整覆盖了题目所有要求的要点，没有生硬直译提示内容，补充了大量生活化的互动细节，情感真挚自然，语句通顺流畅，词数符合要求，完全契合本次征文的主题，是一篇质量很高的参赛作品。
【难度系数】
0.6